Wishing Puddle

I saw a puddle and it reminded me of a Wishing Well.

See that puddle on the ground

your wishes, there they shall be found.

You wish you may,

you wish you might.

I wish to find where my secrets lay,

even if, in the end, I shall have to pay.

This coin, here in my right hand

I will throw it in and watch it land.

The ripple effect will make me wonder,

prove to me all I feel is the hunger.

The need to know what my future holds,

should I look, should I see, fate already has me sold.

You wish you may,

you wish you might.

Today I looked into the wishing puddle,

my thoughts the images did muddle.

I saw today what nobody should,

pictures I'd erase if only I could.

You wish you may,

these thoughts you think lead far away

You wish you might,

for you must be careful what you wish tonight. 

Author's Note

Today while walking in the rain, I happened to see my reflection in a puddle. This puddle made me think of a wishing well, which in turn inspired this poem about a Wishing Puddle.

Tell me what you think. (:

Reviews

[KL]

Careful what you wish for... no matter how many times this can be told it always rings true. Be satisfied with what you have. The poem was good, colours reminded me of a rainy day, but watch your meter. It's all over the place and throws a rock into the river that is your flow. Remember to count syllables.

[Alicia Schroeder]

Very creative and inspiring as well. I love it

[TBird J.]

I love this. Its so mystical and catchy!

[Tony]

Very clever write!
"Wishing puddle"-- don't think I've ever heard that one before.
You interweave the well and puddle imagery nicely here.
The idea you create that the images reflected in a puddle would not
be very pleasing is very effective.

[SimplyDisastrous]

Oh my God, this is absolutely beautiful, Cassi! By far, one your best writes. Excellent job (:

[Cherrie]

p s the picture is perfect for your poem

[Cherrie]

great job!!! a perfect 10

[David W Moore III]

Very nice imagery. Sometimes I wish a wish (any wish) would come true... Oh well. No lottery again!

I do like wishing well imagery though. I used it a little differently in A Winter's Night. A little darker and searching. But yours, I like!

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

The title is really creative! It's beautiful, like every poem you write! I really love the picture, it's amazing.
"Today I looked into the puddle,
my thoughts the images did muddle.
I saw today what nobody should,
pictures I'd erase if only I could."
Omg, that part is just so incredible! Love it so much!
Your'e a fantastic writer, keep it up! ;p

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Lunae,

I think it is very true and very pretty. More importantly it has a message, and I do love messages. I don't know why, but I get all hyper councing in my chair going oh oh oh I get it I get it. Kinda funny if you were here watching. You might think I was like Chunk from Goonies.

Regards,

Matthew

[nono]

nice! awesome picture this is all true sometimes just spilling your feelings out is like a puddle and all the rain are your tears nicely done i do love this!