Can You Feel It?

The winds whispers
ruffle the trees leaves
while the midnight moon smiles.
Can you feel it?

The early morning dew
quenches a blade of grass's thirst
while the moon and sun cross paths.
Can you feel it?

The late morning heat
tickles a horse's back
while the sun brightens the day.
Can you feel it?

The afternoon rain
sprinkles here and there
while the sun plays hide-and-seek with clouds.
Can you feel it?

The purple's, pinks, and blues
coloring the evening sky appear
while the sun says good-bye and the moon says hello.
Can you feel it?

The circle of life.

Author's Note

Thanks so much!! (:

For reading my poem!!((:

Reviews

[R E Tree]

I love the structure of this. I enoy looking at nature and I do like the weather. when it rains I like to watch every drop hit my window. When the sun is out I like to come out and sun-bath in my garden. Nothing better then getting a tan. This poem shows beautiful imagery that reminds me of how enjoyable weather can be

[Abdul Aziz]

Very good imagery! I was drawn into the peculiar structure when I first lay my eyes on the poem, but then, I was subsequently more drawn towards its content!
You portray the cycle of life effortlessly, and cleverly. There are many poems that talk about the "circle of life", but I believe you have succeeded in avoiding cliches. There's a sense of fluidity to this poem, and it is enhanced by the structure.
I believe the only slight glitch is in the first stanza. I think it should be
The wind whispers
And ruffles the tree leaves
Apart from that, this is a poem excellently written.

Great job.

[jing]

great! It looks as if the moon says hello. :) Like it, bringing nature to life.

[rainshadow]

I love this so much!! its so beautiful Excellent work ! :D

[Tina Kline]

This is wonderful, it does have a sort of floating feel to it, very peaceful and gentle. It was a real joy to read, and I mean that. Very delightful.

[Dream Weaver]

Wow did I enjoy this write.
I kind of floated away with
it. Wonderfully crafted
a sheer delight to read!!!

[deeps]

This is amazing, I enjoyed this, i like how you have it set up as well.

[emily joe]

i actually like "can you feel it" better. i think feel just describes it better. when you see something, you just see it. when you're able to feel nature, it's a gift. i like "feel" better. i think it fits nicely. because i felt this poem! excellent work, girly ! you've dazzled me yet again ! :D

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damn---awesome imagery--love every verse-and
"The circle of life."
this is perfect piece:-)
love it!!!

james:-)