Beauty of Evil

I saw the moonlight,
play across his face,
so beautiful was he
and full of grace.

A look of sincerity,
my breathe all but gone,
was that a grin
of evil he had on?

One swift kiss
was all it took,
to find my weakness,
my life's nook.

The piercing sensation
faded and dimmed,
while my life's blood
puckered and brimmed.

I lay there helpless
wondering why me?
Why couldn't this beauty of Evil
just let me be?

Suddenly surrounded
by fire and rage,
why did I feel like
my body had become my cage?

One quick nick,
abruptly I knew,
the humans life blood,
my new brew.

Author's Note

I don't know if this one's any good, what do you think?

Reviews

[Iris Jayne]

i'm not exactly a fan of vampires, but this was pretty good. so two thumbs up for that. some rhymes were a bit forced, but that's a problem most of us have, so, it doesn't really count that much. great job. [:

[Matthew Kult]

An interesting read and very delightful. Fantastic flow and excellent word chose. Nothing was forced, and everything fit together well.

[Leanne Conway]

I like this one too...

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"Suddenly surrounded
by fire and rage,
why did I feel like
my body had become my cage?"
Love this verse!!!
this poem reads pretty smoothly:-)
it's an excellent poem!!!

james:-)

[T]

Nice vamp poem. I like the rhymes you used to, they never sounded forsed. First stanza was a really good opener. Well done.

[Smirking Poison]

A grin of evil, huh? And it still draws you in?

Hehehe, very interesting, and caters to the part of me that feeds on the occult and dangerous nature of something both forbidden and beautiful.

Why couldn't this beauty of Evil
just let me be?

A description befitting the poem :)

- Domani Poison

[A. K. MAXIMILIEN]

"My body became my cage" an amazing expression, i luv it..this poem says a lot, and it can be read in so many ways... Excellent!!

[Tina Kline]

I like this. A very nicely written vampire poem with just right about of darkness in it to make it dark and sinister but not all blood and gore. Very nice job.

[deeps]

I like this it's deep, this is wonderful.

[Dream Weaver]

Deep and dark with a slither of light!
well written well done. I can feel it
and envision it...