Now I Lay

I always thought you'd be the one,
the one to call me hun,
the one who'd leave, never,
the one I'd cherish forever.

We grew up together
which, I figured, made our love as strong as leather.
You say you love me,
now all I say is let me be.

Now I see that I was wrong,
no longer strong,
I lay here and weep
due to secrets you cannot keep.

She must be better,
or you wouldn't have let her
 steal you from my opened arms
with all of her wicked charms.

I thought you loved me
but now I see
your love
was never like a pure white dove.

Stay over there,
as I lay here unable to bear,
wishing this pain would end,
and my soul could unbend.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Tina Kline]

Strong on the emotional side describing the heartache described in the poem. I'm guessing you crossed out the you, you'd and yours in the poem to symbolize the person is no longer in your life. (or the person in the poem) Very nicely done.

[Dream Weaver]

Very clever writing and the line strikes were
brilliant. Wonderful flow and I love it.....

[Gianna Perry]

Good rhyme scheme, doesn't have a very strict rhythm to it, but still a powerful and emotional piece of work. Well done!

[SimplyDisastrous]

This is remarkable! Though, I can't seem to figure out why every "you" and "you'd" is crossed out.