Null and Void

Null and Void

 

 

 

the gravity

of your words

weigh upon me

like snow

on redwood trees.

 

you stifle

my resolve

with silence…

a droning hum

that extinguishes

the breath of me.

 

Reviews

[Neville]

this is so cool it makes permafrost look n feel decidedly molten .. From a real cool fan, ME .. 😎💛👍

[Kelly Scheppers]

Thanks Nev! You're the best, then there's all the rest!

[Neville]

shucks girl .. now ya got me feeling like an oyster with two pearls 😉👍

[John the Baptist]

As the warden in "Cool Hand Luke" said, "What we have here is failure to communicate."

[Kelly Scheppers]

Hello, John.! Thank you for visiting me today! Great movie!

[keith]

DAMN GIRL!
THAT'S FUKIN DEEP!
glad i'm NOT the TARGET!
10 outta 10!

[Kelly Scheppers]

So glad you enjoyed it, Keith! Thank you so much!

[Stella Armour]

Being treated with indifference is a heavy burden to bear ...

[Kelly Scheppers]

Thank you most kindly, Stella!

[Stella Armour]

it's a kind of emotional blackmail ..

Stella

[Ookpik]

Hey Kelly, this is pretty - the language feels careful, and deliberate, and those last lines are a great play on words.

I can see some small things that I might alter, or encourage you to consider were I editing the work (your last line, for example, could be separated into a 3rd stanza, for emphasis and symmetry).

That said, there are some nice elements at play here - enjoyed your imagery, and again that's a nice ending you've left for us.

Thanks for sharing,

-Ook

[Kelly Scheppers]

I actually had the last line as a singular line. Thank you for the suggestion. I may edit it with more thought!

[Ookpik]

Minor detail, and at your discretion. : ) Look forward to the next one!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Such a brilliant rebuttal of being smothered by indifference and stifled by neglect. We all want the same things in life; we want to be heard, accepted, respected and loved. And it's not much to ask, really. We don't always need confirmation or validation as much as someone who listens and cares. Your poem is a needle pricking the voodoo doll of loneliness in its most vulnerable parts. Great write, my friend. F.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Wow. I am flattered beyond words. However can I thank you?

[Fabian G. Franklin]

You just did, sweet lady. I'm honored to read your words. You're so very talented.

[redzone]

Breathe Kelly, Breathe!!
They talk about pens and swords, about pain, especially when words and silence are the source of this pain; this use of pen (words) and swords (silence) to wound a heart. Breathe Kelly. Yes the snow is heavy, and the silence is deafening, both meant to freeze the spirit. But, breathe Kelly, let no one take your breath.

I love this poem Kelly. It captures the raw emotion and pain felt when love is lost or not returned. It made me feel the emptiness when there is nothing, silence. I hope this is art and fiction, but if not- breathe Kelly, breathe!!
-Curt

[Kelly Scheppers]

You really hit the nail on the head here, Curt. Your interpretation rocks my world! Thank you most kindly!

[Dara]

I feel your emotions deeply here Kelly. “Sticks and stones may break bones” but words can damage not only the heart but the soul as well. This write is a powerful one and so artfully written.

Hugs!
Dara

[Kelly Scheppers]

I am deeply humbled. Thank you, Dara!

[Lorry]

Sadly it is the ones we know and love who know the buttons topush and the words that sting us so painfully and sometimes even silence cuts and stings us to our core.
Unfortunately love snd trust don't come with a money back guarantee, so we all end up paying the price.
Very nicely captured Kelly.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Your presence is most appreciated, Lorry. Thank you for a lovely review!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

why can another do this to us...
we can love so hard that the result of unrequited love is a hard death to the emotions we thought were as strong and tall as the redwood.
j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

A most beautiful analogy. Thank you, J!