Interesting, with some good word usage. It brought to mind a scenario in which, a woman and man meet in the context of an artistic pursuit of some kind. Perhaps, in the same dance group or an orchestra? Anyway, because the woman is possibly kind of new to all this, as a "novice"; it creates a barrier or tensions between herself and the guy she has eyes for? However, the guy is probably a snob; and doesn't know what he might be missing.! If he appreciated the woman enough, then her novice status in art; would not deter him! He seems to like her physical beauty, as is clearly suggested in verse four? Anyway, this is probably the best work which I have read by this authoress; so far.
Posted 2 Months Ago
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2 Months Ago
A mighty perceptive insight! Thank you!
2 Months Ago
Well, I admit that I made a few intuitive guesses; as part of that insight. I genuinely think it's p.. read moreWell, I admit that I made a few intuitive guesses; as part of that insight. I genuinely think it's probably your best piece of writing, which I have seen; so far.
so what's the story behind this poem?
my first thought was you were modeling for a painter, but then i thought maybe you are getting a tattoo. however, what's important isn't what is happening but the relationship between the persona and the artist. 'our conversation was sparse' and 'trying hard not to gaze upon / the smile behind his probing eyes,' were great lines that say a lot without giving too much away. so i merely ask my question out of curiosity.
Posted 1 Month Ago
1 Month Ago
Sorry, no juicy story to reveal. It was pure conjecture on my part. Thank you for your curiosity!
Virgin on perfection if you ask me .. this is so bloomin cool it is HOT .. I take my Stetson off to ya Kelly .. actually, I don't have a Stetson, I've only been married the once and to the same gall and we have a total of two .. anyway, I digress, I take my cap off to you and truly .. Neville
Posted 1 Month Ago
1 Month Ago
Thank you, Nev! I'll give you a tip of my fedora, my friend!
I like the use of art and touch dear Kelly. I agree. love should be like art. We should paint with hands and kiss. Pleasure and joy. Thank you dear friend for sharing the outstanding poetry. I did like.
Coyote
Posted 1 Month Ago
1 Month Ago
So happy to see you, John. Thank you so much. Many blessings, my friend!
We were all novices at one point Kelly. At least that's what I tell myself when I miss the holder with my thingy... paintbrush, which usually ends in a splodge mess and a woman saying "well I'm not cleaning that up!"
Sometimes I only notice I've messed up when I'm left sleeping in the wet bit...from where my paintbrush landed on the bed and not in its holster!
Now, that's enough euphemisms me thinks, so all that's left to say is nicely captured piece and I'll try my best not to make such a mess next time!
😃
Posted 1 Month Ago
1 Month Ago
You are a wonder to behold, Lorry! Thank you for the smiles you bring!
I FEEL, I SEE, no novice in the poem, or from the pen, but reality in life, or from imagination? Which came first, or does it matter? Through the years Kelly, either you created the poetic moment, or you lived it, first.
Through the years of reading you, I can never tell. Quite frankly, I never want to know.
This is a wonderful description of seduction.
Written in only the way a poet can.
I must admit, l am smitten.
Huggs, Trace.
Posted 2 Months Ago
2 Months Ago
Gee Trace, I don't think anyone has ever been "smitten" with what I wrote. I love it! Thank you!
2 Months Ago
It almost sounds like l read it before l wrote my latest. (I didn't) it's always a true pleasure.. read moreIt almost sounds like l read it before l wrote my latest. (I didn't) it's always a true pleasure to read you.
Huggs, T.
See, I read these poems of yours and begin to count the turns around the knot in the hangman's rope...beauty is a word that compels madness in its inabilities. Should I praise the author or her muse or should I just enjoy the images and twirl the paintbrush in my hand? A thousand ways to say you rock but none suffice. How 'bout I just sip on this hemlock wine...how's that? Thank you Kelly~
Posted 2 Months Ago
2 Months Ago
I hope you know how very much I appreciate this, Joseph. Thank you!