Awakening

Awakening

A Poem by Kelly Scheppers

Awakening

 

 

 

the hush of morning

creeps clandestinely into

my stream of consciousness

 

with each cup of coffee

it rallies the effect

of a cigarette half smoked,

as a love unrequited.

 

 

photography by / Victor Bauer

© 2023 Kelly Scheppers


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Awesome wording and expressions. Never a smoker; i like coffee ☕ and tea 🍵 though.
Pic is awesome.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kelly Scheppers

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much, Sami! How wonderful to have you here. The artwork is amazing. I drew my inspira.. read more
Sami Khalil

1 Year Ago

Wow! Good to know. You are welcome 😊.
First of all, I'm wild about the painting! You couldn't have chosen a more effective one to go with your yummy words. Like you, I've been drinking coffee forever. For 28 years, I smoked, too, and vividly recall that first coffee and cigarette I had to have each morning. A wicked marriage, that was. Heart bypass at age 43 made me quit the ciggies, but that doesn't keep me from totally embracing these words.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kelly Scheppers

1 Year Ago

Everybody loves the painting! It certainly makes a good pairing with my poem, so I'm quite pleased.. read more
Excellent poem. I can empathise except I don't drink coffee and I don't smoke. Although I once did both.
I can still feel the understanding and overall feeling here.
My colleagues when I was a teacher used to say that I wan't a morning person. Perhaps this is why.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kelly Scheppers

1 Year Ago

I don't smoke, never have. But I've been drinking coffee since high school. People often ask me ho.. read more
Ken Simm.

1 Year Ago

5th Nov 1980.
Kelly Scheppers

1 Year Ago

Wow, that's pretty impressive! You should be proud of yourself!
This was lovely. It's raining here now. The mornings I always like best are after the snow. When it gets so quiet and the world is all muffled by falling white flakes. I am glad I quit smoking many years ago, though. It's a habit I do not miss. The coffee, I'll be drinking that when they tag my toe. ;) Thanks for sharing your words. I enjoyed the read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kelly Scheppers

1 Year Ago

I can't imagine a day without coffee! I never smoked, but some of my poems bare mention to it. It'.. read more
Fabian G. Franklin

1 Year Ago

Should never have started so... worse on me for taking it up as a teen. We actually had a "designate.. read more
Yes, like a love not fully there - incomplete, or not there at all. A feeling like that can naw at us even in the back of our minds.

Short but sweet. Good one, Kelly. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kelly Scheppers

1 Year Ago

Thank you most kindly, Tim!
Interesting observation and metaphor here. I can't identify, though. Before the first cup of coffee, I can't really qualify as conscious.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kelly Scheppers

1 Year Ago

I'm with you on that, John. Thank you so much!
Would line 3 read better as my stream of consciousness? I get the feeling that you, like I often do, also might have strained a bit too hard for alliteration when a metaphor may work better.

Winston

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kelly Scheppers

1 Year Ago

It would! Thank you my friend for pointing that out to me. Much appreciate the sage advice.
Okay! So, I am apparently a little trollop! LOL! When looking at the list of new writing, I saw the thumbnail for your picture. With my twisted vision (and apparently naughty thoughts), it appeared as if it was a woman straddled atop a man. I saw your name, and thought, "Uh oh!" LOL! There goes that "I'm not a pearl type of girl" again. :)

Your words are gentle and sweet, like the slow awakening of the day.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kelly Scheppers

1 Year Ago

Gee, Linda, I never would have thought you to be a trollop! Lol, I love how the "pearls" analogy qui.. read more
enjoyed my invite to read kelly. sharp imagery. I do have one small suggestion: regards last line, have you/did you consider the possibility of x'ing "of" or even "of a"
my sense of line thinks the scan might read tighter, really zeroing in on the last image as
a love unrequited or as love unrequited

just a thought

Posted 1 Year Ago


Linda Marie Van Tassell

1 Year Ago

I actually agree with you. It reads much better as "a love unrequited."
Kelly Scheppers

1 Year Ago

Thank you both, Ken and Linda. You're right, it does read better. I'll make a note to make the cha.. read more
Mornings bring many things to light, a new day beckons, daydreams begin and everything starts anew. The previous day's problems are yesterday as today is your day. Love awaits, open your eyes and find it. Wonderfully written.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kelly Scheppers

1 Year Ago

I have a propensity for writing more in the early morning than I do any other time of day. Just giv.. read more

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