Three Days of Rain

 

 

 

 

Three days of rain

and the willow bends its branches low,

like the pendulum sway of a grandfather clock…

like the guileless accordion of fingertips

gliding gently across

a lover’s brow.

 

Reviews

[Leesah]

I absolutely adore this poem....

being a lover of trees, willows being my favorite

this piece is stunning.....

brilliant.

L

[Kristi Brooks]

I really like the way that you take the branches of the willow tree and turn them into "the pendulum of a grandfather clock", thus giving these living branches a type of harmonious interaction with the constant linear perspective of time. It really brings everything that you're trying to say in these six lines more vivid, and thus, more meaningful, to the readers.

[UnderINK]

Simplistic and beautiful. I love the use of willows as a symbol and visual; they're mysterious and beautiful.

[A.J. Smith]

Beautiful, peaceful, subtly sensual...has almost a haiku feel to it. Quite nice, Kelly.

[C. M. Miller]

What could be sweeter than the honest touch of a lover's hand? Your guileless use of metaphors so close together (what choice, the poem being so short!) is a brave poetic touch . . . the cynic could accuse you of being poetically lazy or cliche by writing a poem thusly. He'd be dead wrong, however. This poem truly hits the mark from a mile away, dead center into the heart. I never saw it coming, too!

[Taja B.]

This is a nice little short poem. I thought it was pretty well written in general, with imagery that creates a mental picture of the effect of rain on nature so vividly.

Nice job. Thanks for sharing.