Wrecking Ball

...a love triangle

Wrecking Ball

 

 

 

you had to know

if she was for real

 

it wasn’t enough

that she walked away,

that she broke your heart

with all the subtlety

of a wrecking ball

 

i didn’t mind

picking up the pieces

of you drowning in Kashmir

and a fifth of whiskey

no, i didn’t mind

making love to you

in her California king

till you were comfortably numb

from the pain

 

but i insanely hope

she snares a strand of copper hair

and the scent of me

in the high thread count

of sheets.

 

 

 

Author's Note

For those of you not musically inclined, "kashmir" is a song by Led Zeppelin.

Reviews

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

My Queen, oh Queen, You are at it again! I love the seductiveness you elude and the powerful way you present!

[Kelly Scheppers]

...and you know that means the world to me! Thank you, Eve! x

[Pete]

great analogy - destructive and leveling leaving a flattened mess in its wake. powerfully effective wording and imagery captures the scenario oh so well. immediately thought of the song when i saw the word as i read even before reading author's note. smooth but disturing read. especially love the ending ... :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

It's always good for me to have your interpretation, Pete. I very much appreciate it and look forward to it! Many thanks, my friend!

[Chris Shaw]

What an ending. Way to go girl, a powerful read. And if it had been me, I would have made sure, the strand of hair became strands, and the perfume just refreshed before leaving the bed sheets. That's called playing the game and getting your own back.

Chris

[Kelly Scheppers]

Oh, if those sheets could talk! Lol, thanks, Chris!

[Chris Shaw]

You pick on some great snapshot moments to write about Kelly. :))

[Ted Kniffen]

A delightful, slightly whimsical bit of revenge. Well written and loved the musical references to Miley, Led Zeppelin and, of course, Pink Floyd.

A good write, Kelly.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Thanks, Ted. The reference to Pink Floyd wasn't intentional...it just happened. It fits quite nicely there, I think. ; )

[Ted Kniffen]

Yes, it does.

[Patricia Wedel]

Kelly... I am a late bloomer in life... being raised in an overly strict religion. I am just learning about many popular singers who knew of life as it really unfolds. To enjoy the virtues in life, we need to understand and feel the confusion that does exist. Your poetry takes me where I can understand myself and others. truly, Pat

[Kelly Scheppers]

Your kindness and sincerity always comes through, Pat. Thank you!

[Patricia Wedel]

Kelly... your tenderness and emotion is a beautiful Monet of Art and heart. truly, Pat

[Patricia Wedel]

Romance thrives when the odds are stacked.
We are creatures of temptation and saviors of mankind. Understanding and forgiving is part of life. truly, Pat

[Coyote Poetry]

This is down and dirty poetry. The poetry I love Kelly. I wanted to sing these words. Perfect ending to the outstanding poetry. I did enjoy this one. Would be amazing verbal poetry.
Coyote

[Kelly Scheppers]

I always read my poems out loud to myself, tweaking them if they sound off in any way. I guess you could say I'm my own worst critic. Thank you, John!

[Coyote Poetry]

Reading the poem out loud. Best way to edit. We hear our mistakes. I enjoyed this one Kelly and you are welcome.

[barleygirl]

I enjoy the way the rhythm of your poem seems to mimic the beat of Kashmir the song, which is also reminiscent of the title concept -- a rocking motion of bonking things methodically. I very much relate to your well-chosen details that summon some of the imagery of the Led Zeppelin era. The only thing that didn’t feel as organic as the rest of your poem: “high thread count sheets” – somehow this seems too status-conscious, compared to the rockin’ rest of your poem. I think I might’ve been this wrecking ball, back in the day *wink! wink!* Fondly, Margie

[Kelly Scheppers]

I can't imagine you wrecking anything, Margie! Thank you! ; )

[Papaya]

so perfect. every bit of it.
i especially like the last stanza.
that is the human part

[Kelly Scheppers]

I'm mad about my sheets, so I streamed a little bit of me in there. Thanks, Ana!

[Alfred Kukitz]

The ball smashing into my eyes as my senses enjoy the groove of your talent

Regards,
Al

[Kelly Scheppers]

Thank you, darlin! Hope life's treating you kind!

[Alfred Kukitz]

no! home improvement sucks!

[Kelly Scheppers]

OMG, I hear ya! My husband remodeled our kitchen last spring...what a job!