Love it.. seen from an innocent bystander watching the two of you bid and play,wait and wonder. You really do know how to write a scene beautifull, Kell, me darlin' fun and fascination all the way.. We ised to love it when us lot, seven of us, were young. but it was barred, banned and all by our parents come Christmas Day when we had to talk to each other and the like. Laughing now, of course. Your weave of words have given a new slant to the game with Pretzels acccompanied by boozy breaths and baited hope for one of the best to be yours, captured !
Not the pretzels you eat, Em - the album by Steely Dan - Pretzel Logic. Thank you, darlin!
6 Years Ago
GHysterical here.. in the early hours.. am such an idjit.!!! i need lessons in most subjects, Kel.. read moreGHysterical here.. in the early hours.. am such an idjit.!!! i need lessons in most subjects, Kelly!!!
dear Kelly... while playing Monopoly with my seven year old
granddaughter... her Mother took a photo showing a back view of me at the table...
where half of my money had fallen on the floor.... Monopoly has it's disadvantages
when Wall Street is in trouble and the Dow average falls to below the expected
rise of possibility. Perhaps the Gingerale lost it's fizzle and the younger player
had Root Beer with a straw of hope. Love your poem, Kelly. Monopoly is pure
luck with a small fortune. As ever, Pat
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
It's a great board game, isn't it?. This and Scrabble are my favorites. Thanks, Pat!
Kelly,
An interesting combination of objects in this poem, put together in a pleasing way. A simple game of monopoly becomes a stage for memory. Nicely done.
Tom
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
It was indeed a stage for a memory...one that I visit often. Thanks so much, Tom!
I feel a little late to the party, but that's ok. Felt an instant connection after reading the title. First reading was good, second reading was better. I could definitely get a Boz Skaggs type sexy 70s sensation from your brief descriptive scene. The whole poem had a good vibe. Just try to not drink scotch whiskey all night long and die behind the wheel. (Sorry. Couldn't help myself on that last line).
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
A little late to the party? Never happens, not in my book. I'm flattered you enjoyed my little scen.. read moreA little late to the party? Never happens, not in my book. I'm flattered you enjoyed my little scenario of a great song!
Lol...the pretzel logic...skip the spicy mustard on that one!!! What a great picture you painted here. And its strange to talk about characterization for a poem, but this has it, a clear view of the motives and intentions. Really liked this one!!!
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
I have a habit of calling each of my poems a favorite. They are like old friends to me whenever the.. read moreI have a habit of calling each of my poems a favorite. They are like old friends to me whenever they come into focus, and that makes me feel quite proud. Friends have that ability to make you feel that way, so thank you, my friend!
Excellent. Links me to my own memories which is a yardstick for all good poetry.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
A little walk down memory lane for me, as well. I'm really pleased with how it turned out. Thanks, .. read moreA little walk down memory lane for me, as well. I'm really pleased with how it turned out. Thanks, Ken!
Takes me back to college days...simpler times, but wonderful ones. Haven't played Monopoly is so many years, but the memories of playing...and with whom...still make me smile. Thanks for evoking the memories, Kelly. Lydi**
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
It was such a time consuming game, wasn't it? Thanks, Lydi!