Dying of Thirst

Dying of thirst

 

 

His lips placidly conformed

to the bottle’s annular opening,

his thirst

momentarily quenched

as he grasped the curvature

of its tapered neck.

 

He consumed the malted liquor,

fervently licking the heady delight

repeatedly  from his lips.

 

Just once, she wished

he would take her

with the same

unchaste provocation…

 

her insatiable need,

momentarily quenched.

Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

The thirst for soul-fulfillment seems ever lingering. As his quench remains unfulfilled at the bottom of the bottom so does hers. Lonely is never so lonely as when felt and acknowledged. Lovely!

[Kelly Scheppers]

Thank you for your review, Linda. What a pleasure it is seeing you!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

her insatiable need,
momentarily quenched.

Love these last lines a lot! Also like the contrast between the man and woman's needs. This was sensual to read 🙂

[Kelly Scheppers]

I was hoping the contrast would be clear. Thank you for seeing the sensual side of it!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It was :)
You're welcome, Kelly. A pleasure always 😊

[Enchanted-Raven]

Wonderfully done dear....enjoyed :) x

[Kelly Scheppers]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it, Tina...thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

Realistic and true words written. I believe when we forget the days of wild love and crazy needs. Leave our lover alone. We had failed our lover.
"Just once, she wished
he would take her
with the same
unchaste provocation…"
I understand the lines above. I'm guilty also. Love need constant attention to keep alive. Thank you Kelly for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Kelly Scheppers]

Thank you for the warmth of your words, John!

[Coyote Poetry]

Booze and drugs. Can steal from our life. You are welcome dear Kelly.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Excellent portrayal of this vignette as she watches his fervour for his beer and wishes he would desire her as much. That she seeks 'unchased provocation' suggests perhaps an unrequited love as she longs for something illicit, an affair perhaps?
Which ever you inject the emotion of her desire and sense of frustration so well Kelly.

[Kelly Scheppers]

I appreciate your acknowledgement of that, John. Thank you!

[William Liston]

Kelly, I know one thing for certain: Whenever I read one of your pieces, I'm certain to be left in awe.
This poem is beautiful in how it combines many emotions and leaves a sense of mystery throughout. First, you have the man with his alcohol addiction, and then, for a softer feel, you have the woman yearning for her man's love. The two nuances blend well in this piece.
I also like your choice of detail in how it captures the moment, but still allows the reader some room for interpretation. Take the ending for example: it lets the reader fill in his or her own details without making the poem feel incomplete. Excellent work!

- William Liston

[Kelly Scheppers]

Consider yourself hugged, my friend - what a wonderful review! Thank you so much, Will!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh if only---his lips for the lips of the bottle...
would be a great trade off, if only he would succumb to her instead of his addiction to the alcohol...
love the twist of this..like twisting off the cap...he needs to take a swig of her.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Indeed! Lol, much appreciated, J!