As I Metaphorically Breath You In

 

I feel I could write forever

my pulse consisting

of syllables

and nouns,

your name being

the cardiac massage

upon my chest,

as I metaphorically

breathe you in.

Reviews

[Cassie]

I just saw this today...wow

[Kelly Scheppers]

Thank you, Cassie. I've been away for a while, so this was a warm welcoming!

[barleygirl]

Nicely creative & original! Each line very unexpected & smoothly crafted with strong imagery. As you mention early on, I kinda wished it would've gone on & on a bit more! *smile* Fondly, Margie

[Kelly Scheppers]

I think the writer knows when a poem is complete. Sometimes it simply comes through. I know it when I reread it and no longer have the urge to tweak something! Thank you, Margie!

[barleygirl]

This feels a little bit argumentative to me. I wish it were possible to simply express my feelings without it being threatening or like I think you should do anything different . . .

[Kelly Scheppers]

I was simply stating as a writer in general, who knows when their poem is finished. It's like the poem speaks for itself, that it is complete. Of course, that's just how it is with me. I didn't mean for it to sound sarcastic in any way. ; )

[barleygirl]

I was probably feeling a little prickly, too! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Alexa Apothic Red]

Ooh, this is heavenly and quickens one's heart just as you describe the "cardiac massage." It feels like an inspired moment. This one you speak of is not physically present, but you can take a deep breath, think of him and feel his presence flood your senses and make your vitals pulsate with him as he invades you to oxygenate your blood and brain. He just became the source of your life just from that deep breath in of him. So delicious a thought! Well done!!

[Kelly Scheppers]

I'm delighting in your numerous reviews today. However kind of you to shower me with such emotion and joy!

[Alexa Apothic Red]

What excites me holds my attention.. and your writing was kind enough to offer me that deliverance today! This pleasure is all mine, dear one.

[Ardra]

as I metaphorically
breathe you in...

very nice one kelly.... words has its own magic :)

[Jibey]

Clever use of grammatical and literary terms to conjure up the special relationship a writer has - through words. Full of emotional punch.

Beautiful graphic as well!

[Kelly Scheppers]

...it is a very special relationship, indeed...and I feel very blessed! Thank you!

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Beautifully physical and sensual in both words and photography! " I metaphorically breathe you in"-a stellar visual. And as a nurse- i appreciate the somatic references even more...who am I kidding, it's the woman in me that loves this the most!:)

[Kelly Scheppers]

I love it!! Thank you for your kind words today, and also for your dedication as a nurse - you truly are revered for what you do!

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

((HUGS))!!

[MCS]

Enjoy the ride when the muse is kind and giving.
Well done!

[Kelly Scheppers]

...thank you!

[Trace]

Why do I see the possibilities of unnecessary respiratory resuscitation as a good thing?

Don't stop until they fog up the mirror.

Trace

[Kelly Scheppers]

How you doing, Trace? Thank you so much!

[Trace]

Doing well. Enjoying springtime in the Rockies. Snowed yesterday.
Washing the truck today.
Always enjoy reading you.

[Trace]

Doing well. Enjoying springtime in the Rockies. Snowed yesterday.
Washing the truck today.
Always enjoy reading you.

[Ted Kniffen]

What better way to deal with your muse. Writing for some is a struggle to discover words and arrange syllables, while for others it second nature. Something done as sure as breathing. Well written, Kelly.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Thank you, Ted. It was truly so kind of you to say!

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! do i love this one Kelly! a retired RN its right down my alley ... personifying syllables and nouns with your pulse is brilliant... simply brilliant!! i would never have thought that cardiac massage could be so sensuous and fully romantic .. what a fine job ... surgical, deeply emotive, into my library with this one!
E.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Thank you for the joy you bring me, Gene. I am thrilled beyond words you enjoyed it!