Ah, when we write as teenagers, it is all darkness and gloom. Fortunately, this was not a prophetic write for you. It is filled with emotions and beautifully written....you obviously were always a writer, Kelly. Lovely photo to accompany your words as well. Lydi**
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you so much, Lydi. I think so too. I was the only one in my tenth grade English class who act.. read moreThank you so much, Lydi. I think so too. I was the only one in my tenth grade English class who actually loved writing essays!
Well written, Kelly. It perfectly describes a feeling that overcomes those, from time to time, who are alone. Like so many of those emotions, aloneness seems to work the best for a lot of writers. Good work.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
I believe that, too, Ted. I think I'm more inclined to write when I have that down time to do so. .. read moreI believe that, too, Ted. I think I'm more inclined to write when I have that down time to do so. Thank you so much!
We have all been there sweet Kelly. In this you present great images. The first stanza in particular stands out. You also capture a forlorn feel which gives the piece its provenance.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you for taking time out on your vacation to read this, John! Have a safe return home!
This is so very endearing and a feeling most of us have felt at one time or another. I have also known love and then lost it but better to have loved and lost then not loved at all. Your poem says it all. Simply an awesome wistful write.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
The warmth of your words are most dear to me, Dara. Thank you so much!
7 Years Ago
Your writing is always such a pleasure to read. I look forward to each and every one.
' The leaves that shuffle through city streets' says how it is
There are words and -there are words and yours have quite briefly but beautifully created such fragile feelings, such longings - all made more specific, more desperate byyour repeated phrase.
You write so well, there's never a sense of artifice whether or not the emotions come from heart or imagination. There's something near vunerable in that picture too, well selected, Kelly.
This poem really touches me somewhere deep, deep inside.. there must be a chink in my armour!
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
...you have most definitely put a "chink" in mine! A thousand thank you's, Emma! x
it's funny, ironic... I have known love, and yet I can honestly say that this poem "fits" the way I feel for many years now... lol... somehow I got all upside down confused Kelly... so I do not have to "remember"... nicely done poem Kelly..
but did you have to go and remind me??? hehehehe
redzone
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
It was one of those poems that simply stuck with me, like a love you can never forget. Thank you fo.. read moreIt was one of those poems that simply stuck with me, like a love you can never forget. Thank you for relating to it, Curt!
the opening draws you right in. wonderful imagery. the repetition reinforces the effectiveness of the sad longing. this could be used as an example in a poetry class. just a great, quintessential piece.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
I love using the repetition of a line - it really helps to deliver the message of the poem. Thank y.. read moreI love using the repetition of a line - it really helps to deliver the message of the poem. Thank you, Pete!
i sure do remember that feeling ..what an aching lonliness to the brink of despair ...and the miracle of learning that love happens when we give it up ..with the understanding that we are OK all by ourselves and it isn't so bad after all ..we turn the corner and bam! down the love tubes we go .. then the fun really begins doesn't it .. i love your poem .. it is so soft and romantic and your rhyme and rhythm belie those "young" years when you wrote this .. its beautiful .. i was so far from being so mature when i was in the agony years :))) great poem ma'am! well written for sure!
E.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
The "aching loneliness" is overwhelming...that's what I think this reveals. Thank you, Gene!
yes it does dear Legs ..it certainly does and in a way that has a softness only wise choices bring t.. read moreyes it does dear Legs ..it certainly does and in a way that has a softness only wise choices bring to us in life ..read it again ...its just so fine ma'am
"I’ve seen the innocence of a child
Ships against currents, raging wild
The total being of being alone "
but love I’ve never known."
I still haven't known this feeling, so I can relate to this on a greater level. I think it feels better this way though ;)
A lovely write although a bit sad..