Love has to be one of the most poignant and visceral emotions within this existence. To not know it, in its true essence, is unfathomable for a pure heart and here shows the depths of knowing it in other guises for a Poetess feels everything here, both in the light and in the shadow, remarkably potently. Love has a habit of turning around a rain soaked corner when you least expect it xo
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
You have a way of brightening my day...thank you, Poppy!
I've come to learn that there is an upside to the feels behind this poem Kel - that is being able to pen a sister-poem called 'A pain I'll never know' - a pain that won't go away and which wrenches at the whole being.
But that is miniscule in comparison to the memories and feelings I have to keep warm.
An emotive write dear Kelly, for any age.
Bravo.
:)
I really like the rhyming scheme and flow here. “Night can blind,” very nice. As far as the authors note, love is a force to be reckoned with that sometimes is inevitable, nicely penned for an old piece.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
I appreciate your review, Jorge. Thank you ever so much!
Being that some of my first postings on this site were unrequited love poems, I could certainly relate to this. I don't consisder this an "unrequited love poem" (though, it could be considered one depending on how it's interpreted), but I can say that it vividly captures the pain of never receiving and/or feeling love.
I loved the smooth, consistent rhymes in this piece as well as the unique imagery introduced in each stanza.
One issue with the punctuation: Look at the last line of each three-line stanza, and you'll see that pesky thing WC does by replacing a dash with a quotation mark. I suggest using this dash instead ( ~ ).
Thank you for noticing that, Will. { May I call you, Will? } I couldn't understand why the hyphen .. read moreThank you for noticing that, Will. { May I call you, Will? } I couldn't understand why the hyphen didn't show up, now at least I know its not my imagination! Many thanks for the kind words.
7 Years Ago
HOW DARE YOU CALL ME THAT!!! ... just kidding ... of course you can call me Will : )
7 Years Ago
...thanks for reminding me to fix the problem with the hyphen, Will. It looks much better now!