Your words may be muted, but not so those composing your Senryu, that yell volumes of saturated angst (from the nightingale's song?). Could it really be this that prompted such a powerfully striking outpour?
I mean, I've heard of those who abhor raucous, incessant caws of the crow, or shattering screeches of the barn owl, but the beautifully captivating, endless array of varied sounds from the nightingale, I never heard making anyone bleed muted words, but I may have gotten it wrong … I've been known to do that before. : )
MMmmm … a delicious picture adorning this excellently penned, appealingly displayed, spot-on count piece.
You're an amazing poetess, whom I enjoy and value highly … hugs 'n blessings, Kelly, and quit that muted bleeding! ~ Richard
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
I know equating the nightingale's song with pain may be hard to fathom, but after a heart is broken,.. read moreI know equating the nightingale's song with pain may be hard to fathom, but after a heart is broken, perhaps even the lofty breeze from a willow can cause the heart to shatter. I am growing accustomed to your face...and I thank you for your most kind analogy!
9 Years Ago
Aw, Kelly … to think of your heart being broken saddens the soft heart of this caring bard.
.. read moreAw, Kelly … to think of your heart being broken saddens the soft heart of this caring bard.
I sincerely hope this poem is of times past, Sweet Poetess! ~ RJ
This brings about emotions that are so very hard to put into words but you have accomplished it in your bittersweet, beautiful write. It leaves one speechless for sure.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Your reviews are most endearing to me, Dara...thank you so much!
wow! i am stunned ... i don't even want to rationalize this ... it seems only to be felt .. very powerful to me
E.
ps very well done senryu ..very well done indeed!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
...you certainly know how to cause one's heart to flutter! Thank you, E! x
To bleed muted words. A interesting statement. You said a lot in the short poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
"To bleed muted words"...it's my own interpretation of a poet, bleeding. I'm thinking of using it a.. read more"To bleed muted words"...it's my own interpretation of a poet, bleeding. I'm thinking of using it as a book title. Thank you, John!
The sadness of not being able to enjoy the nightingale because of pain and loss as your heart bleeds in poetic mourning so well captured in this senyru Kelly.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Perhaps one would not parallel "a piercing shrill" from a nightingale to impale a heart, but when th.. read morePerhaps one would not parallel "a piercing shrill" from a nightingale to impale a heart, but when the heart has been broken, even something as beautiful as its song could drown the heart in pain. Thank you for seeing that, John.
Bloody brilliant Kelly!! I got this vision of you being pierced by an invisible shaft of sound and the words escaping your lips are red inside word bubbles, yes i'm weird but its a great thing to be so inspired, maybe it will make me write better but for sure you are already a writer supreme, the short Senryu is a difficult form to instill meaning into so few words but you did so and the pictures derived from this are amazing, flying like the Nightingale around my head, great poem straight in my library so i can read always :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
I could listen to your analogies all day long, Richard! What can I say? ...thank you, my dear gent.. read moreI could listen to your analogies all day long, Richard! What can I say? ...thank you, my dear gentleman of a friend!
i like the irony of this...the nightingale is supposed to have a song of peace and love...this is the opposite, although this means to me...that the song remains the same, but sound shrill to the one who has lost her love.
beautifully sorrowful.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
...to one who has lost love, indeed! Thank you, Jacob!
And now Mrs FT Ledgrew, Mr FT Ledgrew would be very proud of you with this fine write, the senryu as I was!!:):)
You weren't looking over his shoulder were you.......!!!?????
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
He is the one who inspired me to try, and I must say, I quite enjoy the pursuit of them! You are as.. read moreHe is the one who inspired me to try, and I must say, I quite enjoy the pursuit of them! You are as dear as ever, Andrew, thank you!