In the Gloaming

In the Gloaming

 

 

I wait by the window

for your return,

like wilting flowers awaiting sunlight…

in the gloaming.

 

Reviews

[ANTO]

Kelly I sang a song called "roaming in the gloaming" for all my drinking adult life without realising what I was even singing. I know what it means now.

Such a sad, complete work of art here. Great imagery painted with words and the font choice is inspired too. Well penned dear friend. :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

I love how I'm learning so much about you in your reviews. You are an opened book, one to never put down! Thank you, my sweet and wonderful friend! x

[Trace]

Waiting is where the beginning of the first signs of an emotion we call anticipation is born.
Glee is when that emotion is replaced with fulfillment.

(or something like that....LOL)

Trace

[Kelly Scheppers]

...anticipation is a good thing...it makes us aware we have a pulse! Much appreciated, Trace!

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

fire breathing women should never feel like wilted flowers, but thus it does happen...your beautiful! remember in the gloaming....

[Kelly Scheppers]

you flatter me...how sweet it is to blush again! ...thank you!

[erinwrites]

Great description, really liked it

[Kelly Scheppers]

Thank you, Erin!

[closed]

good use of metaphor

and simile too i think

it paints a firm portrait of a dying love
waiting to be revived..


enjoyed this piece

-Dream

[Kelly Scheppers]

Sometimes a poet doesn't know how a piece is going to end, until it presents itself...and then it presents itself. Thank you!

[closed]

i agree with you
sometimes they seem to take on a life of their own

and you're welcome

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Awesome lines with and feelings strong...

[Kelly Scheppers]

...thank you...so kind!

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Welcome!!!!

[Suzy Hazelwood]

The waiting game - can be long sometimes. :o( Even though sad, this has a lot beauty in the way you have written it. I'm sure this would make a good spoken word - short, sweet, but reveals it all!

[Kelly Scheppers]

The weight of your words absorb me, Suzy...thank you!

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

There is so much desperation and death in this though cool calmness can be felt. The knowing the person may never return, like the aliveness of the flower because of the roots being cut off.

[Kelly Scheppers]

...such an astute observation, Nadia. Thank you!

[Winslow Des Totes]

I learned a new word today! XD never heard gloaming in my life so I looked it up; very clever! I liked the imagery and the staunchness of the last line especially. Nice write. :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

I am much obliged to have enlightened you, Winslow...thank you!

[T.W. Early]

I liked the very simple, yet very visual idea of this. great job!

[Kelly Scheppers]

Thank you, T.W.! ...nice to meet you!