Hard to Swallow

...a little wit and whimsy!

Hard to Swallow

            

 

It was a crowded bus
that allowed me   
the proximity of him.

The relative humidity

was climbing
as my eyes took him in…
the opened shirt
the stressed jeans,
the crossed leg upon the bent knee.

I tried hard not to stare
at the size of his boots,
wondering - aimlessly
if it gave any credence to

the analogy it emulates

I pulled my lip into my mouth
biting hard in contemplation,
smiling my most cheshire grin

Such truths ,
analogically speaking
would be hard to swallow!

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

...inspired from my days of riding the MTA to work. It's amazing the people and situations you come in contact with! ; )

Reviews

[free-writer]

Subtle and sexy. So steamy! Really love the closing stanza

[Kelly Scheppers]

...and I am most proud of it, as well! Many thanks!

[Marina]

oh my, now that's a spicy poem right there!
Girl you know how to treat them shoes analogies alright, haha :D
Lovely.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Thank you, Marina!

[aLittlePain]

Ahh....a little wit and whimsy, pfft more like a bus load and a ton of steamy. I wonder was he mc steamy or mc dreamy? ...lol that's some bus ride. Your styling some sassy vibes here! So damn clever and terribly cute. R xo

[Kelly Scheppers]

Hmmm, I think he was more like the Channing Tatum type, Rach. Sooo glad you enjoyed my bus ride! ; )

[aLittlePain]

Haha...I should have known the stressed jeans was a total give away

[1VJ]

Audacious! You're a sassy vixen in the nicest way possible. :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

Lol, I just follow where my muse leads! ...thank you, Paloma!

[barleygirl]

This is superbly delicious in its subtle naughtiness. This might be my favorite sexy writing of all time! It's remarkable the way you twisted an old familiar & crass idiom into something so fresh & flirty & fun & full of nuance! If I were to highlight my favorite phrases, I'd end up re-posting most of this in my review!

[SmittyJas]

Oh those crowded buses and the sights you must forsake Lots of cute guys and your loss of concentrations steer.

[SmittyJas]

Your eyes steer and your hearts on your sleeve as your tempted to say sir what's your name?

[Kelly Scheppers]

Lol, that's a thought I quite enjoyed keeping to myself! Thanks, Smitty!

[reesemonster]

Yes! Sexy and fun and relatable.

[Kelly Scheppers]

...so glad you enjoyed it!

[daninstockholm]

ohh myyy,, how i wish i had been the one on that bus!!! Great analogy,, great write!! So erotic, so well done!!

[Kelly Scheppers]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed my bus ride...thank you!

[terry smith]

I wear stuffed clown shoes for just that reason!! Ha Ha ...jk. nice piece of art Kelly!

[Kelly Scheppers]

....lol, thank you, Terry! ; )