The Ranting Liguist

 

 

 

For the curious

Here's to the oblivious

Jus for the set

Fiber optic direct

I'm a sedative in my dialect

Slow your thinking

And expand on grammaticism

Spit my intuition

Too many speak fanaticism

Sometimes I think to myself

What's this s**t they spittin

 

 Governmental

To expose the influential

Cast the vote place the note

And show the locusts exponential

Financial suicide potential

As simple as

The dark seeming dismal

Complex like the light

Beaming with potential

As unalike as day and night

Accept for when life dismisses you

 

 I've spent too many dreams beamed

On the mental color schemes

Of too many loose seams

So I'd prefer you explain

Your true poetic means

Sorry if sometimes

I play with chainsaw themes

Cuttin down sentence structure fiends

Where's the bat

I'm next to swing

With the voice of a scorpion king

 

 Just one of many lyricists

Combined with a linguist

As long as my art persist

Served with a realistic twist

The thoughts that set the mind adrift

And cause egos to shift

Conjuring up lyrical bliss

Painting my reading list

Colorfully I exist

Upon a clear canvas

Exotic in my vividness

Reviews

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

I love how you paint yourself - the brave way in which you place yourself forward. Go ahead - chop those words out and to pieces, that is what we are here for. Well penned. Quite compelling. Your original voice shines through in this work. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[E.A.Rose]

Wow, I really enjoyed your poem. It has an amazing rhythm (spelling?) to it and flows to a dramatic beat. Very Nice. One of the best poems ive read on writerscafe.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was a great poem full of excellent twists and wordplay with an interesting and original view on the craft.

[Nickjohnson]

I really love your style, if you have one. I don't know how to say it, the simple way you direct the flow of the sentence just explodes in my mind. I truly love it.

[Brette Medb]

I loved the last two lines, they spoke truth and conviction. A great write.

Brette

[James K. Blaylock]

I truly love the flow and feel to this piece. You've done a really wonderful job, man!

jkb

[Gary H]

Enjoyed the rap. I think with something like this I would need to hear it spoken word for the full effect. This shows some good thinking and avoids some rhymes and rhythms that tend to feel awkward in pieces like these. To be a true rapper though you must expand in the swearing....only joking!

[lucia]

Finally something worth reading twice...love the way your lines expand and contract! (very nonconstructive review, soz)

[ah]

nice write, thanx for asking me to read it... i really enjoyed it

[Yvonne Heidt]

Cuttin down sentence structure fiends
Where's the bat
I'm next to swing
With the voice of a scorpion king..

I disagree - I think that this flows really well. I always have to stop everything else going on in my head to read your work (not an easy task as well you know!) But I always get something from your wordsmithing that makes me think and sit up straight in my chair.

Excellent, as always.

[Kathryn]

I liked it. Very interesting choice of words... It doesn't really flow, but it shows something diferent and unique and that's very admirable. Probably not my favorite of your work, but it was really good! :D keep writing; you've got a great talent for it!♥