The LQ

Inspired by a part time grind I hold

 

Standing at the lottery machine an old man hands me his bible...

Numeric prayers upon a page...

We bullshit for a minute he walks away waiting for that eight o' clock hour to see if he's been saved

And I stand amazed how we depend on idols from the cradle to the grave

Dollar signs and faces upon paper rule the land of deceit and the home of the enslaved

Where I started my revolution with a New Years Eve resolution

To clear my mind of all pollution

Born sinner but you can catch me on the mountain praying for absolution

You need to understand I'm only human


 

An old woman just cashed her social security check and tells me to hand her a bottle of her medicine

All of a sudden I've become a pharmacist

I know exactly what she needs so I hand her a bottle of Majorska and a packet of Anacin

I see the same faces of all races I'm even starting to see them in different places

Hood rats and young thugs talking about catching cases

On a block where no one carries I.D. so the cops have to remember street names and faces

Youth die prematurely thinking the all mighty dollar brings them greatness

It's a twisted way of thinking but being broke is baseless


 

I know a hood rat turned princess body built for sex and brainless you

Know the type ---- aimless

Knew her for mad years, survival through mad fears  

Cold at an early age can no longer shed tears

Family life was turbulent, moms a dope fiend and never taught her about being abstinent

Now she's knocked up seven months pregnant and HIV infected

Just doesn't make sense, but I understand yo that life is hectic

So that next breath I respect it, see a silver spoon I was never blessed with

Just the ability to lyrically wreck s**t, live fast and die quick


 

There's this kid who often thinks to much, unloads thoughts on paper writing rhymes and such

Often wonders what sets him apart, what makes him different

How to stand out and get people to acknowledge his existence

Quite type so he expresses himself in sentence

Watched him grow developing discipline and confidence

Serving rappers from project tenements to suburban basements

Come a long way since being an apprentice

Raised as an underground emcee, the kid becomes a lyricist

Reviews

[Ninelilies]

I used to work in a gas station, so this one caught my eye. It's amazing, the five characters you mention span across societies. I love rap, so I enjoy the fact that you included some of its elements. "Quiet type so he expresses himself in sentence"...beautiful. And your description of the girl, "aimless"...you nailed it.

Hope to see more from you-S

[James Mayfield]

This was a great look at real life. So often in our field we see flowery odes to love or half hearted suicide attempts on paper. This piece showed life as it is and not as some fictional wonderland we use to create. Nicely done and very well written. Thanks for sharing.

[TL Boehm]

another stellar write. Raw - real, gritty - yet articulate - awesome ryhming style - I would love to hear this as the specific intonations you give each word.
BS and the Bible in the same stanza...now that's bold - loved it.

[Natalie C]

I am really getting into your pieces. Just love the philosophical feel most of them have and this one is no exception. They carry a message for those who's willing to hear and always seem to touch on the things some rather not think about.

Great piece, I just loved it

[Nick Erickson]

"Born sinner but you can catch me on the mountain praying for absolution
You need to understand I'm only human"

Very good flow and imagery in this piece.
Your writing draws the reader in from the start.
Well done.

[Yvonne Heidt]

Born sinner but you can catch me on the mountain praying for absolution
You need to understand I'm only human..

I know that I've told you that I love your style (more than once) but I just can't say it enough. Talk about a voice of the times.

I get physically and emotionally caught up in your work. Honest and to the point in an awesome way.

Bravo. Excellent.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

This piece is quite lyrical. I like the way it flowed. Nicely done with this piece, I enjoyed it.


Great Write

[Nely Amorim]

You really became my descriptive guide through a life I cannot fathom... I find your poetry insightful, and written so that emotion is hovering the surface, yet it doesn't influence my opinion. Your amazing.. thank you for sharing and please always invite me to view your poetry.. as i don't get much time to read as many as i'd like, but i'd hate to miss yours :)

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

How intriquing...wonderful words - I like the lyrical nature and flow of the piece plus it tells an important story - you are doing well to put your words to page...Absolutely a great piece of work. A few spelling errors but that is easily fixed...Thank you for sharing.
Light,
Siddartha

[Jacqueline]

Are you a Slam poet? This sort comes off as a freestyle. Whether it came from off the top or written down, the subject matter was gritty and real. The flow was crazy and it touched on the ugly side of many lives. Very hard hitting, but not in a preachy manner. Loved this!