Wishes

If you could wish...
on just one star
for just one wish
with just one scar
for just one thing
for just one second
to learn a thing that's such as magic

to sail the seas
and walk the land
to learn the things
and forget your habits
to live for love
and love your life
would you make that sacrifice?

Author's Note

Just something I've whipped up... I wasn't quite sure on the format, any opinions? Anything welcome (constructive criticism, things to improve), just please no hating (:

Reviews

[Emerald Seas]

Format is fine. Structure, unstructured, meter, free verse... it is all a matter of preference. A thought provoking write. One wish is a difficult thing to decide. Your mood, situation, etc. of the moment dictates that decision. Would you chose the same thing/person tomorrow?

[Daring Darling Didi]

Interesting thought, I enjoyed how you wrapped up the poem with that simple question that defined the entire thing. Looking forward to more like this!

[etxcp]

This is really good! Nothing I can tell needs to be fixed! Wonderful write!

[Mullmugmos99]

Thanks (: i'll definitely keep that in mind!

[flyingdreams]

dont think much about format. allow your words to flow freely.
everything else is secondary

[Michael G.]

For me, a free form of poetry works best. Others, like more structure. Personal preference. I don't see a problem with format.

I enjoyed the content.
I like the way if you put the first line and the last line together, it asks the question that was the basis for the whole poem. Intentional or accidental? It doesn't really matter. It just showed the "completeness" of your thought.
Keep writing... keep feeling what you write.