A Crack

There seems to be a flaw; a crack right there...
It lives underneath your lies and creeps inside your dreams
It festers in your closet full of skeletons and screams
It sneaks into the darkness and digs itself down deep
It caresses round your wrists and you smile as you weep.
Its funny and its tragic, its beautiful and sad
It helps forget the lustre of the things that you once had
As the crack oozes ecstacy and forgiveness down the drain
An evil grin sweeps your cheeks and it starts to numb the pain
But soon the crack will weave its jagged way back together
So you return to slice apart that mother f****r forever.

Author's Note

Comes from a dark time in my life. Writing helped me get through it. Please tell me what u think!

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The ending gets at you as a reader quickly:

But soon the crack will weave its jagged way back together
So you return to slice apart that mother f****r forever.

I liked how you take us in your lines...feeding us a bit more and a bit more...getting to know the insides of this crack...and how to evolve from it...

[Antoñyo]

My "Slice Girl" was inspired by a few similar poems I came across here when I was new (a few months ago). My outside-looking-in feelings are there, but this is a cleverly written piece that rawly expresses both the pain and disgust I've learned about since being here.

Nice work, thanks for sharing

[MoriartyMesa]

Well, this bit of a link explains what I discovered in between the lines. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7fFo-WZsm5Q

[Mulligitawny]

I completely understand its pretty dark and was coming from a time of depression in my life. I was very unhappy and suicidal, this poem is very personal and i dont expect everyoe to fully grasp its true meaning. But thank you for reading and for your comment!

[LJW]

Was with you until the last line.

I have no prob with swearing, it's not that....

Just left me with? ???

[DarkBeauty]

This is a great write, full of expressions by the wonderful dark word choice, I love it, I think if you broke it up into stanzas it would be a better format for your poem and easier to read, keep writing Nice job