Frankenstein

because you were long gone before I said goodbye

Frost
Grows where your fingernails
Claim to be
While I am pounding
These rusty, colorblind walls
begging to find you
Somewhere in between

I didn't want to sip the truth of
What was now in front of me-
A love, that had passed without
An official time of death

Like Frankenstein,
I tried to revive
The feelings you once had,
even though they had moved on
6 feet under

And, with no invite to the funeral,
I decided to dig your own grave,
Where I lay flowers every once and a while
But will never again, bring back

Reviews

[Chris]

This one touched me... because of the real 'tween the lines... sigh ...and not a THING you can do.

[pinhead07]

Very nicely written! I like the imagery, the character bouncing off the walls unable to accept the death of this person. A loved one that has passed away, one tries to replace the beloved, but it is always difficult, "And, with no invite to the funeral,
I decided to dig your own grave"

This part got me too. You kept it short, crisp, I liked it! :)

[words preferred]

Again, you have hidden messages and twist. I enjoy your style of writting it's unique and unpredictable something I try and do in my writtings. The ending was the best!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and igor...shed a tear at the grave...the monster was a sympathetic character. and this love is sympathetic for the reader when he or she thinks of how the speaker gave life to the relationship...and then had the worst part of it rebel and leave...i see the torches coming in the distance...

i love the metaphor used here...

nicely done, Ally...

j.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

And, with no invite to the funeral,
I decided to dig your own grave,
Where I lay flowers every once and a while
But will never again, bring back ...

Wonderful lines to finish of the prose...Sometimes you need really needs words to express emotions far better than the actions. Very Nice Poem!

[Gabriel]

Beautiful poem.. one of the best I've read on here, really enjoyed it. Thanks for posting it.

[Ally Monique]

Thanks Gabriel :)

[PhillipCalitz12]

this is so sad...i honeslty cant decide if i like it or not...writing was good though