From the first stanza, one gets the idea that there is something positive here. But the second stanza proves that to be false.
I like how you move from one feeling to another completely different emotion.
But this is not a rare thing to happen. More often than not, we tend to depend on people who win our trust with their fine behavior, only to be disappointed later.
Thanks for entering it into my contest.
This is among the best submissions I have read until now.
From the first stanza, one gets the idea that there is something positive here. But the second stanza proves that to be false.
I like how you move from one feeling to another completely different emotion.
But this is not a rare thing to happen. More often than not, we tend to depend on people who win our trust with their fine behavior, only to be disappointed later.
Thanks for entering it into my contest.
This is among the best submissions I have read until now.
This is a unique & symbolic way of describing someone who helped you come back from a hard time in your life, only to leave you feeling worse afterwards. Great job, very nice. (:
Betrayal of trust... doh, so bad -
`Break me even more` (see, I would want to pause here)
`I cannot be repaired` ('cos this is harsh)
...and the final statement seems without hope...
but less is more... because a million pieces stuck together again... then smashed again...
does sound pretty `more`
so the less is much more... kinda
good luck with that!
ar... but hang on then it sounds as though the person who picks you up is in a million pieces... so I have to re-read... hmm
always a bit wary of SHOUTY pieces though... and me me me - I don't know...
have been accused of `blogging` when reviewing... too many dandelions, that's my trouble
What we do...A Poem by Erotic Goddess
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i am just a girl who
LOVES to WRITE
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Love Starts with a Smile,
Grows with a Kiss,
& Ends with a Tear.
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.. more..