The Differences

This is my day ... This is how I feel ... This is what I portray ... These are the differences.

THIS IS MY DAY

The sun is out

The clouds are out

Its sunny and bright

Its gloomy and dark

Like a beautiful spring day

Like a cold winter night

 

THIS IS HOW I FEEL

I am laughing

I am crying

My world is smiling

My world is frowning

I am living a dream

I am living a nightmare

 

THIS IS WHAT I PORTRAY

I am under control

I am confused

I am alive

I am lifeless

I am at peace

I am at war

 

THESE ARE THE DIFFERENCES

Between my life

Between my heart

The whole woman

My broken soul

What you see

What you don’t

 

October 19, 2007

 

Reviews

[An Ordinary Woman]

Wow!!!!!!!!!!! Where the heck are the reviews on this???

This is fabulous, it's brilliant!

I love the message, I can relate, I often feel the same, wondering how I can smile yet be unhappy on the inside. I think what the difference is, is hope. Always hoping ....

Not very often I come across a writing that simply excites me, just like this, I love it. I think the gray and black compliments it sooo much! Yay, go you!

I hope you wouldnt mind if I link to it?

[An owl on the moon]

You drift so vividly back and forth, and in and out of your subtle appearace and your quaking soul. In such contrast you paint a picture of so many of us hanging on the edge of our lives, wishing we were so much more than our mere appearance... Brilliant...

[No One Important]

The dichotomy of your words speaks to me in ways I have never before seen nor felt...I am spellbound by the many layers alluded to in the piece. I may even go as far as saying I am baffled as to how wondrous a poem as this could have eluded my reading before...Brava, miss Serendipity, brava!!!

[Annebelle Ashire]

This write,
reminds me of why my pen name is Annebelle.

I have a write called "Annebelle's last rant",
but for personal reasons I do not have the right intentions of posting it.

Thanks for the insight.
~*AC*~

[larryb]

So So good a pleasure to read :)

[Imperfection]

It is hard to know what a person is going through. What you see is often not what it is. And what it is may not always reveal itself.
Sometimes it is hard to even get in touch with one's own feelings. You don't know whether you're happy that you've landed a new job or whether you're sad that the job will take you to a city away from your loved ones.

Life is complex. I do REALIZE that but I still don't completely UNDERSTAND it.
I found this poem extremely relatable.

Loved the use of color here. Great write.

[logmein]

Great!! At first I thought it was two different people in two different places. Explanation ending of one woman whole or broken....Hasn't that been each of us at times. I like the use of the colors to add to the mood of each line. You even thought of using blue for the heading of each....clever.

[Dawn Jones]

I like this one. There are a lot of people who I am sure can relate.

[Yvonne Heidt]

Absolutely stunning and for me, at least, true. Wow. I am stunned. Excellent job.

[Crystalbluepersuasion]

i think this SO innovative and outside the box....genius, really. love it!!!

[Emily B]

This is amazing. I wondered all the way through what made the difference. Finding at the end the polarity of the life and heart; whole woman, broken soul. Well, that's just extraordinary.