Nepenthe

Just raising a toast....

NEPENTHE

Washed upon this Plutonian shore; was I,

cast away to roam the bowels of this vast dark tomb,  

where curdling screams  pierce the ebony veil of Satan's lair,

and acrid smoke both ominous and inviting fills my nose.

Here where I'm doomed, and even God himself turns his face,

to HIM I raise a toast; a goblet filled with every tear I've shed,

I tip the bittersweet liquid to my parched mouth,

quenching an aching burning thirst from deep within.

"Nepenthe! Nepenthe!" I mockingly exclaim,

I fall to my knees, hysterics rocking my unstable frame,

I pitch myself forward in mock reverence,

"Almighty One, Come purge me of my sin."

Reviews

[Alessander]

The title caught my eye. Nepenthe is an elixer to banish grief, or for celebration, I think. And the name of a cool little bar in Big Sur!

Anyhow, I found the tone of this epic, in the traditional sense of the word, like Milton and the such.
I really like the first line, "Plutonian shore", and other word choices like 'acrid smoke', 'goblet' , 'parched'...

Did a great job of creating a certain hellish atmosphere, almost a claustrophobic rebellious undertone.

I have a feeling it's referring to perhaps a Greek myth which escapes me at the moment, but the "sin" part makes me rethink maybe in christian not greek context.

Anywho, cool stuff.

[Ink Seductress]

I have to admit it was a mix of both. Greek mythology and christianity. It was gothic

[TL Boehm]

Just raising a toast. this poem does have that epic feel to it. There is a pull, as though it is part of a larger piece. Strong lines in it
A goblet filled with every tear I've shed... mock reverence to the Almighty One...
A fascinating write.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Intense, a deep and dark poem, very nice to read, wonderful work

[Cody Williams]

Fantastically dark and brilliantly written! Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece! Have a good one!

-CW

[Avinash]

Very dark and mesmerizing with all its ethos. A grand tale of pain and fight for identity and existence. The meaning of life however continues elude.

[Mayank]

It's damn intense and deep. Brilliantly written.

[George Peck]

That was great sounded like apiece that belongs in a horror story. I really enjoyed this thank you for sharing.

[R Smith]

good work its got a gothic feel, plenty of melodrama and the darkness of the soul, makes me feel the need to beg for mercy and to beg for more of your great writing :)

[dillonjensen]

I really enjoyed this piece. Well crafted, miss.

[ANTO]

Atmospheric work - I could feel the hacked lips, the unbearable heat and the venom towards the jailer.
Hah! and an ad just appeared declaring 'GHOSTWRITER' - this is getting too spooky altogether

[Ink Seductress]

Ha! I couldn't agree more! This type of writing just comes so naturally that it even freaks me out. I'm reading some Edgar Allen Poe and I guess he kind of just rubbed off on me, haha. And thanks for the review :)

[ANTO]

Each to their own Niyia - don't get me wrong though its potent writing. Im off for some more - its like when you get off the thrill ride after having your wits scared - in a while you forget the fear and still feel the adrenalin and endorphs and you so want more

[Ink Seductress]

Love how you described that. And I really do so hope you read more, always good to hear praise. I'm off to read some more of your work, too. :)