SAVE ME...

SAVE ME...

Someone save me,
i have become my own enemy,
the glint of a knife excites me,
and the freezing feel of it is an ecstasy all on its' own.

I welcome the pain and on occasion I invite it,
the bite of a blade slicing through my vein,
will give me the release i so desperately need.

This call for help is useless,
if I'm lucky when I'm gone someone will read this,
Never hope too high, or reach too far,
cause sometimes you'll succeed, but in the end we all fall...

Reviews

[Cahjli Symes]

I couldn't agree with you more on the last line. As humans were selfish and we take over and destroy our environment due to transgressions and greed. As that maybe so, you should always stay strong no matter what situation or environment you're in. I knows its hard but time alwayd heals wounds

[Charlie Ragsdale]

This poem is wonderful keep up the good work

[Baby Ricochet]

Cutting isn't a good hobby. Try something else. Good poem

[Ink Seductress]

I don't cut ? This is more of a look in to the mind of someone who may be going through this situation.

[Jeremiah Cook]

The last lines really penetrate. "Never hope too high, or reach too far,
cause sometimes you'll succeed, but in the end we all fall..."

[Tree]

I agree with Cahjli, those last two verses will be ringing in my ears for a long long time. We live our lives like that sometimes, don't we? careful not to love too much or dream too hard, because if we fail/ the fall can kill us.
That title too, I liked how you treated it with a slash, shame you couldn't do that with the bigger title, right? I don't think the program allows for it, but I'm glad you threw the original version of how you wanted the title to look up here anyway.

Nice / creative piece



Diego

[Ink Seductress]

Yes, i was quite disappointed that i could not do that with the title, but thank you :)

[Cahjli Symes]

Omg please forgive me for the typos but you get the point

[Ink Seductress]

Lol don't worry i got your meaning the first time, it was only one word Hun. Chilllll haha

[Cahjli Symes]

I put were instead of we're

[Cahjli Symes]

Then knows instead of know

[Ink Seductress]

I see I am dealing with a perfectionist, didn't know we were so much alike :)

[Cahjli Symes]

I can tell lol your writing style is a bit similar to mine Xp

[Cahjli Symes]

Always* i hate this cell phone