He

cold black stone

gleaming in dark bright

light of the world

and so alone...

 

the flames rend

the flesh from flesh

and she

stumbles again.

 

 

Reviews

[MsFrazier]

pretentious? lol! thank you for reading it. yes, it may be exaggerated, but that is because the emotion that inspired it is pretty intense. ;) lets see what you have written, shall we? this will be fun.

[Ben M]

i can't tell whether this is good or just really pretentious...either way the images are pretty strong, especially with the limited word use. also, im a sucker for people that dont capitalize their poems.