Pash

The excess lipstick,
A blotted kiss on tissue.
He pockets with care.

Reviews

[Eilis]

I just read your response to Jacob below. I don’t often say this, but that is quite romantic when read in the context of your poem. It is easy to be full of feeling in a budding relationship, but long term relationships definitely transform the way we see one another and our concept of access to the person.

It’s a lovely thought this early morning. I love the way your poem starts a scene and then lets readers fill in the details. Great visual and emotional appeal packed into this one, Mrudula.

[Mrudula Rani]

I usually get ride of these tissues from his pockets regularly, but there is one in his wallet, with my name and bears an old date ...he just won't let me throw that out. I often tease him saying he is carrying dangerous DNA and if it falls in the wrong hands, there is a possibility of more nuts like me running around lose.
Thank you Eilis , for Your delightful and very thoughtful review.

[Sneh]

oh lovely...such a passionate memory lifetime...

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you very much.

[emmajoy]

What a wonderful senryu! You never fail to hit home with a specific cause in mind: in this case, given warmth with enduring magic. May I wrap your language around me for a while.. please. Is that a nod I see beforre me.. .. ?

[Mrudula Rani]

I send you the abrações muito carinhoso para te( the most love filled hugs to you dear) thank you Querida linda Emmajoy.

[emmajoy]

Always my pleasure.. truly.

[Robert Trakofler]

oh goodness I got nervous i thought that was referring to breast cancer for a second... oh never mind that's benign i didn't know what the other pash meant oh that's sad... what a jerk!

[Mrudula Rani]

Calm down, no harm done.... take a deep breath. Inhale 1,2, 3... now exhale 1,2,3,4,5. Esta melhor?

[Robert Trakofler]

contanto que o seu bem dear Mrudula:)

[Mrudula Rani]

Aqui está tudo ótimo. Muito obrigada. Uma abraço, querido Robert.

[Wondering Mind]

Very sharp edged, but sweet senryu.
It's been a while since I've read/ heard the term Pash.
Excellent!

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you, for your very kind review.

[Einstein Noodle]

i love it ...emotive and relatable ... and romantic ;) had to look up "pash" .. well done Mrudi!
E.

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts, E. I appreciate very much.

[Chris Shaw]

Superb Mrudula, so much emotion and imagery contained here. If that is your man that has saved your blotted kiss, then you have one in a million my friend. You knew that already didn't you? A gem.

Chris

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you Chris for your marvelous understanding of a relationship, I have known him since I was 18 and you are spot on about having that one in a million. Thanks again. Have a great weekend.

[Chris Shaw]

And you too my friend:)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This lovely senyru perfectly captures obsession and perhaps adoration which may be healthy or unhealthy dependant upon the circumstances.

[Mrudula Rani]

I sometimes wonder that myself... thank you John, for putting a huge smile on my Saturday.

[Paul Bell]

Oh! this conjures up all sorts of different scenarios, though that may just be me.
But the lips of a woman in print can be very erotic and foreboding.
Three killer lines, Mrudula. Sensual as hell, love it.

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you Paul, glad to be impressing you, one of the best( my favorite) writers on Writerscafe.

[Paul Bell]

This is a great example to writers. You don't always need thirty lines to get the message through. The reader can put their own thirty lines to this just reading it.

[Neville]

this has got the lot.. but sensuality and passion, stand out in particular.. as does human behaviour and particularly that of lovers.. if I could give ya more than top marks.. I would hand them over freely and unconditionally..... Neville

[Mrudula Rani]

You reading my words and appreciating them means the world to me, Neville. Thank you for your incredible review.

[Neville]

guess we are both smilin big :)

[Mrudula Rani]

Obrigada para tudo. Uma abraço.

[Neville]

A big one for you too :)