No form.

No form in the dark
No light from the ark
The ark holds my void the empty mark.

BUT I'M HOPEFUL!
OPTIMISTIC AM I, I'M CHEERFUL!
I BREATHE THE AIR - LIFE IS BEAUTIFUL!

Then I'm home alone by myself
Mistakes I made by myself
My opportunities lost - I'm besides myself.

THEN THE SUN RISES
THE NEW DAY BRINGS NEW SURPRISES
MISTAKES ATONED A NEW ME ARISES!

God I hate when it happens so quick
Disappointment flowing through me so thick
The sting of shame like a burning wick.

SO I LEAVE AND THEN I MEET HER
SHE MAKES ME HOPE AND I BELIEVE HER
"NO MORE DEPRESSION FOR YOU," SHE SAYS, I WON'T REFUSE HER.

No more sorrow in my whispers now
No more waiting, I'm getting better now
My life is my own once more now that we're together now.

Author's Note

Felt bored, wrote a poem between read request.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Unsure of the meandering here, whether positive or negative, whether true emotions or the writer's perception of a search for happiness.

Strange how boredom can lead to mystery, to uncovering something even the poet didn't know was present.. or manufactured!

[Mr.Write]

This poem wasn't inspired by any event in my life lol. I just got bored and started typing down words however my writing style is such that I allow whatever ideas that come to mind during the course of the endeavour to ultimately dictate the flow and the narrative hence I never know how my stories will end even though I try to plan their progression.

[emmajoy]

You wrote that with only one breath taken at the beginning!

[Mr.Write]

😂 lol what?

[emmajoy]

You typed about seventy words with only one ful-lstop... you must have been short of breath at the end of the para!!!

[Mr.Write]

Hmmm... I've never known a full stop to indicate(.) intervals where one catches their breath(.) cause if that's the case(.)a lot of stories would look a whole lot different(.)H.P. Love craft's works for example(.) would resemble a piece of paper(.)with black pepper spilled all over it.

I like you though, you seem like someone who knows not to take things too seriously and you've been an excellent troll. XD

[emmajoy]

Thanks for calling me a troll... given time, will find a compliment for you!

[Gee]

EmmaJ, tut, tut... the most eloquent and giving " troll " on writerscafe

[emmajoy]

Sarcasm has never been my strongest fault!

[Gee]

Whilst Inexcel

[Gee]

Whilst I cannot type but excel

[Mr.Write]

Lol you two are so strange XP

[J. J. Nightingale]

You are strange and a mindless troll.. We shall pay you no nevermind .. ever !! Mr. Oh so Wrong !!

[Mr.Write]

Lol WTF, how am I the troll here? XD

[Mr.Write]

emjoy= J.J. N.?
I feel like you're the same person.

[Najam Us Saher]

It is very difficult to be happy when you are sad. You proved by this poem that it is possible. Beautifully written. I really liked this.

[Mr.Write]

Thanks for stopping by I'm glad you liked it.

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.

[Isabella Disney]

Nice - to me this was a 'light' read, but still with so much meaning.

Great job!

[Mr.Write]

Thank you for your valuable words and time. It was supposed to just be a brief reprieve between answering read requests I was given but then I thought If I'm going to write a random poem why not make it meaningful - the irony. XD

[Mr.Write]

I just realized that this poem can either have a good or bad conclusion depending on who you determine "her" to mean.

If you choose to interpret "her" as a woman the depressed narrator meets then all is well and he gets his life together. However should you ascribed a more sinister role to the "her" in question(like say... death) then the poem's final narrative will take on a darker tone or a "bad ending."

[Sami Khalil]

The ups and downs of depression or the bipolar personality. You depict them so good...:)...............

[Mr.Write]

Thank you for those kind words Mr. Khalil. The narrator is definitely depressed and forces himself to be "optimistic" after each attempt as evidenced by his bombastic display of self affirmation and comforting words.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. You are welcome...:)................

[AcasualPawn]

BUT I'M HOPEFUL!
OPTIMISTIC AM I, I'M CHEERFUL!
I BREATHE THE AIR - LIFE IS BEAUTIFUL!
THE NEW DAY BRINGS NEW SURPRISES
MISTAKES ATONED A NEW ME ARISES!


Awesome, tone

Walking in a park
Good job mr white

[Mr.Write]

Hey thanks, I wanted depict a depressed individuals tries and failures of wanting to get out of his depression by lying to himself that everything will be okay despite his repeated cycle of failure each day that stands as testimony to the contrary; till he decides to leave his environment for good(his home, his neighborhood, his old life) and happens to meet the love of his life who makes it all better.

[AcasualPawn]

But you made it sound like Saitama of one punch man

[Mr.Write]

Lol the UPPERCASE text is to showcase the moments when he's feeling good, when he decides to dust himself off and make an attempt at improving his life once more. The regular text is for when he's down and feeling depressed you can tell by how he berates himself in the regular case lines. The poem shows a contrast between when he's depressed and when he tries to be optimistic.

[AcasualPawn]

You are absolutely right. But after reading it i remember Saitama.. I don't know why. But good job

[Mr.Write]

I have a theory I think it's becasue of "ONE PUNCHHH!!!"

[AcasualPawn]

Ha ha lol.....