Waters of Love

Possessing a regrettably hackneyed title, this is a song which I intend to use in a stage adaptation of Dumas' "The Three Musketeers". I am considering constructing an extra verse or two if all goes to plan!

Waters of Love

Your path is clear,
Your gaze ahead,
You hear horizons call;
But you don't hear the tide come in
And you don't stop your fall.

Waters of love, out of your depth
Now you're awake, your senses asleep.
All of a sudden,
You've been under forever,
And your heart is calling you down,
To forget yourself, and drown.

Forget yourself
And find yourself,
You're a different self today;
Five minutes like five ages crawl,
Five ages fly away.

Waters of love, holding you close,
Soothing your pain, stopping your breath
You try to stand up,
With a sea on your shoulders
But your heart is calling you down,
To forget yourself, and drown.

Reviews

[RainyDay]

Great-no, that will hardly do. Excellent? I sound like a playschool teacher. Magnificent? Perhaps. But human words are fragile things. Takes a while to shoo them into any decent sort of pattern at all, and to do it and describe the unreachable depths of the idiotic helplessness of love....well, I take my hat off to you, sir.

Maybe "the best poem I've read in a long time" will suffice?

[Skelasoldier]

Very good and dark, keep up the good work :)