SideKick Moment 04.23.09

Just walking around talking to myself and this is what came of that conversation (does that make me crazy?)

 

Celibacy is just not an option
See cause if your not giving it up
Then at the very next CLEAN troth
I’m stopping,
Cause my Horse needs watering
I’m your Chef and your Waiter
I’ll take your order
So come closer and whisper
In my ear
Sweet words to draw our orbits near
Have no fear
When our worlds Collide
Your anatomy was made for me to fit
Right there inside
Your Milky Way
The Brightest stars are your eyes
Only those who can with stand the glare
Will receive love without compromise.
 

Reviews

[THE LOST ROSE]

Another nice poem Jason. I love your prespective on things. You have a common way of looking at an issuse but a creative way of explaining it. That is your gift don't ever lose it. Thanks for sharing!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

A very nice write.

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hey this is cute.... ok..honestly the first few lines... and i was like..z 0__o m... but lol...got it as it progressed... nice metaphors... the ending being the most powerful and beautiful part of the piece.. The Brightest stars are your eyes
Only those who can with stand the glare
Will receive love without compromise.


nice usage of words...and a fun read... :)

[M. View]

I like this way you put this together creative.

Good Write

[Shadow19]

VERY creative!
love it much

[*~Poetic_Essence~*]

Love without compromise--i love this part, it is a great ending thought that leaves me pondering and wanting you to give me more of your playful words. But my favorite part is the beginning of your poem it is bold and it catches your audiences attention indefinently...It reminds me of a song called "Customer" by Raheem DeVaughn..i love him by the way lol..but there is a section that mirrors what his song speaks of..I really enjoyed the read...

Well From One Word-Play Poet To The Next...Always Remember To Write With Your Heart!

[Masq]

This is a very creative piece. I particularly liked your play on words. Nice write.

[sheerpoetry]

i love how you fininshed it. i love the whole thing its awsome

[Thunderlyrics]

That was hot Jay!

Really on point!

[mae-mae<3]

Quite original and creative. I loved it! Nicely done Jason. It makes you think quite a bit.

You neighbor in words,

Mae