i need a shower

Muse said i should write a poem

The soft
    carress
makes my  mind explode
(that tantalizing touch)
a roaring ocean in my ears
swallowing my every thought in it's endless depths
     there is only you
(goosebumps on my skin)
     i can feel your heartbeat
        throbbing
    with me
        throbbing
warm like the womb
i close my eyes into your kiss
an oblivion of blackness
a darkness so inviting
    i plunge
(your fingernails on my back)
    love and lust are one
drenched in a tsunami of ecstasy
my ears tremble from the the warmth of your breath
    as you whisper…

    "S**t, I forgot...
          I'm on my period."

Reviews

[OTownPete]

Oh man, have I been ther and done that. Sheepishly I will admit that I forged on and attained my "red wings". Your friend in words, Pete

[Emily B]

definitely looking forward to reading more of you

[minisla]

That is hilarious. Love the ending

[Sarah Redigan]

HAHAHAHA!!!! Nice .. i was into it and then BAM i started laughing ... thank you for sharing i loved it !!!!!! Seriously great twist !!!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Interesting...but a part of nature that we can't seem to escape. LOL I love the delerious descriptions of love and lust in this one; hot, steamy and amazingly articulate. Great form factor, and the lines really flow. You could go with or without the last little bit...with it, the poem becomes satyrical, and without it, it would be pure rapture. Either way, i enjoyed it :)

[Rob Santana]

LMAO, like the twist at the end.

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

Come to think of it, this does sound like a love scene in a sci-fi novel! Very nice!

[Amy Azra Dean]

A good read which made you want to read on.An abrupt, but funny ending I liked it!

[Chris]

For some an ending...

good thought and heat...fair flow and build.

[Pax]

lol...an unexpected ending... almost everyone goes throught with this kind of sitaution... which makes this write reality based. Great piece and very entertaining!