Loving Hands

Loving hands hold the crumbling remains

Blurred are these images once so clear

What will you store in the empty rooms

That once echoed beatings of my heart

 

Faded from the pages are our tales

Warm your cold blood by the fire

 Burn the lyrics of our song

And dance to the rhythm of denial

 

Oh how we built and burnt the bridge

Aberrated love spell that was fed to me

Cradle me in those same loving hands

Kissing me goodbye in a dream

 

Faded from the pages are our tales

Warm your cold blood by the fire

 Burn the lyrics of our song

And dance to the rhythm of denial

 

Which one of you are you today

Is it the one i used to know

Brick by brick you stack them on

But i could never climb that high

 

Never did i ever change the plan

Watch me drown and wave goodbye

From your penitence you can't hide

In your loving hands our love died

Reviews

[THE LOST ROSE]

Standing "O". Sometimes it is pieces like this that help bring the defintion of poetry back into reality. I am very guilty of writing poetry that can be describe as a story or journal entry, etc. Every now and then I write a poem. You my friend have a POEM! This is the first piece I've read and I will say that I will read more but help me by sending me more read requests please. I enjoyed this piece this was very inspiring.

[Chaos Stone]

what can i say that hasnt been said
great work, very lyrical and emotional

[octane143]

Oh tearjerker! What a sad and loving poem hun, one of your best in my opinion. As always the flow is impeccibe but the subject matter is...well...emotional.

In your loving hands our love died

Wow hun, I felt your pain here, very well written!

[Spoken]

Which one of you are you today

i like that line. funny how people seem to change after a while.. or maybe we just start to see them as they really are. Great ending really ties it all together, solid.

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

BRAVO MR LOPEZ! BRAVO! one of your personal best, although i like all your poems, and you always keep em short (something i need to work on) lol. it could almost be written into a song, the way you repeat certain stanzas.

Never did i ever change the planWatch me drown and wave goodbyeFrom your penitence you can't hideIn your loving hands our love died

what a great way to end the poem, "in your loving h ands our love died..." you are the best here at ending poems with catchy conlusions, that sum up the whole poem. Not everyone can do that, sometimes I have trouble, but you do it well.

thanks for sharing.

Kena

[Butterflymom]

Wonderful !

[Collodi]

A nice piece. Please, easy read. I'm not sure about the refrain of the entire quatrain 3 times, but the quatrain form works well for this blank verse piece.

typos: "cradled", "aberrated", and "rhythm"