Comatose

I’ll sleep another hundred miles

Then I’ll sleep one hundred more

I’ll sleep until someone can give

This cursed man a cure

 

I used to drive one thousand miles

While perched behind the wheel

That’s when I offered everything

That someone else would steal

 

Now I sleep until the winds

Of peace embrace my day

I fear the winds will never come

And in my sleep I’ll stay

Reviews

[Dani California]

Excellent rhythm and rhyme here ML...

Now I sleep until the winds
Of peace embrace my day
I fear the winds will never come
And in my sleep I'll stay

This is my favorite stanza because I relate to it so well. Sleeping the pain of reality away... been there done that. Escape.

You've expressed it well, once again my friend. I just hope it isn't your current mindset.. as I wish you the happiness you deserve!

Great work!

[Last Lying Look]

This is an intense piece.
My favorite part is:
"I'll sleep another hundred miles
Then I'll sleep one hundred more
I'll sleep until someone can give
This cursed man a cure"
It had a haunting vibe to it.
Amazing write!
-E.M.R