Emotional Suicide

I wrote this for the "Cry me a river" contest

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While the everlasting sleep slips into my bed

 These images slowly find their way into my head

 For the very last time where in my dreams I can hide

Welcome to my beautiful suicide

 

Here's to the death of all dreams from the days gone past

To all things that will wilt and were never meant to last

When I Water them raw in acid rain

They will burn a hole that starts in my brain

 

And slowly works its way into my heart

Burns What little is left of what’s now torn apart

There in cold and empty chamber number two

Is where I kept the hopes and dreams i had for you

 

 Echoes of your name bounce into chamber number one

Where joyous laughter used to live but now is gone

You were once my saving grace and my life raft

But Today I found your smile in a photograph

 

Still protecting you I shielded you

From the rain of tears

By Holding you at arms length

As you did to me for years

 

Never letting me in for fear that it might be real

Afraid, I suppose, that from your heart I might steal

Never again will I allow my love to be shared

I will destroy all signs that say to all I ever dared

 

In Empty fields of wind and ice

that's were my heart now will reside

Welcome to you all

To my emotional suicide

 

Reviews

[justjenn_2u]

This poem is very deep and self absorbed, filled with the agony of a love that broke the inner spirit.

The symbolism used throughout the entire poem is magnificent. To journey through the chambers of love, I am able to see how one loves and the other will not allow herself to be loved.

Very powerful piece!

[THE LOST ROSE]

Your emotional roller coaster is felt in this poem. When the ride is over we get off and maybe get back in line once again. This is what life is all about. To have victory at the end is the key. I believe you did. Great piece of poetry again!!!

[Kathryn Star, Shine!]

Deep, emotional and to the the point of where we all reach, do we dare? I love the way you tangle and twist, what is, what must, what what was, and who you are now. It's a big open wound ready for salt... KS

[!!..Love..!!]

This is deep and dark, Formatting is also brilliant.
But its the real feelings behind any poem which makes it so special.
Great work my friend!

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"Here's to the death of all dreams from the days gone past
To all things that will wilt and were never meant to last
When I Water them raw in acid rain
They will burn a hole that starts in my brain"

Powerful words and intense imagery. Heartbreaking, but honest and forthright.

Emotional suicide . . . I think I've committed this a time or two.

Brilliant and universal!

[Sara]

that too, sounded so amazing, it flowed beautifully. i can feel the way you feel. emotional suicide is perfect for a title. sometimes the pain we have seems to be killing us inside, and this really describes that.

[Riverdance]

Absolutely beautiful. Gave me chills!
I can feel the pain dribbling from your words.
Emotional suicide. Even I know what that feels like. I like that term too.

Thanks for sharing!

~Rd

[lAcEy_LoO's Poems Site]

You have captered what i go through with this poem. Beutiful writting and its very emiotinal!!!!

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Great emotional description in this work. You have put into words those things that many of us think and feel but can never find the right words for. I feel that perhaps we have all been to this place at some point or another. Well done. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Light,
Siddartha

[Mistral Bilgera]

i didn't know you'll be capable of writing this melancholic piece! I've known you for illuminating and wisdom-filled poems, this one is like reading from a different writer, but it still has the same power and beauty like your other works- a proof of a really talented writer! :)