The first two collected sets didn't rhyme and that caught me a little off guard when they started to
But this piece kind of scared me.
For the person.
Like a since of hopelessness and confusion over powered everything.
Like I could look at the most beautiful sunset and still feel a deep stab in my heart that that person wasn't there to share it's beauty with me.
Painful Mr. Lopez...
Painful.
This is really sad, perfect for a broken heart. The irony of this world is that our best works always comes from a broken heart. It is surely sad but so true and honest too!
wow! Pining away for someone, who cant relate? The passion, sadness and lonliness is echoing through my heart. Riveting, I keep wanting to go back and read it again, and again... My heart aches
This is an excellent piece...the passion and sadness of unfortunate loss are there. What a great read. Thanks for sharing this with me. I liked it very much. =)
this is so touching to me! the feeling and thoughts that go through one's head when they can't forget...is just horrible. i know exactly how it feels, almost like you hate someone so much, but you don't want to live without them. i know many people don't understand this writing, but you really spoke to my heart in this piece!!
WELL I COUL FEEL THE SADNESS IN THIS POEM AND THE WAY THE TRUTH OF THE WAY THE HEART FELT..yET AGAIN ANOTHER GREAT POEM..YOU HAVE SHOWN THE BEAUTY OF WHAT CAN BE IN THE HEART OF A TRUE SOUL THIS WAS A OUTSTANDING PIECE AND i COULD NOT HAVE PUT IT ANY OTHER WAY THEN YOU HAVE IN HERE..i WOULD SAY FOR THE LONELY HEART THAT YOU CAN FEEL THE PAIN IN THIS AND THATS WHY IT MADE IT BEAUTIFUL CAUSE YOU BROUGHT OUT THE TRUE FEELINGS THAT YOU FELT AND THE GRETEST WAY THAT YOU EXSPESSED THEMWAS REMARKABLE CAUSE NOT EVERYONE CAN SAY HOW THEY TRULY FEEL ABOUT NOT HAVING THAT SPECIAL SOMEONE BY THEM WHEN THEY WANT THEM THERE THE MOST.YOU HAVE SHOWN THAT THROUGH THE PAIN YOUR STILL SURRIVING IT AND BEING ABLE TO HOLD STRONG AND HAVE THE LOVE SO DEEP FOR THAT PERSON THAT YOU ARE WILLING TO DO ANYTHING FOR HER...KOODOS MY FRIEND AND TY FOR SHARING THIS WITH ME.....GOD BLESS
This to me speaks of lifes learning lesson in love. How we find something, think it unbreakable; perfect, then it falls away, and we are left empty, not understanding why things went the way they did, or how it all happened.
Overwhelmed we walk the path you write about, hoping and wondering if things will be made whole again in ourselves.
Touched me again, I caught goos bumps. Deep feelings and glorification, smashing.
The rhyming didn't fallow at the beginning, but it appeared after the first two verses.
Then the poem made me sink into it. Love makes us live trough a crazy routine, that brings
skill and experience, but the routine doesn't want to stop, it keeps scolding and barking
till we almost dry out, and then it stops - when we have emptied ourselves running around
homes, towns, cities, countries, lands, continents, planets, satellites and galaxies. Great work! ;)
eloquent.......Those carrying scars can certainly relate....your words seem woundingly fresh and yet I suspect time has weeded itself amoungst the memories.
This is a wonderful piece, wrapped in emotion. Although I enjoyed each and every line, one really created both image and mood...'her face in every drop of rain'....Oh, so lovely that it pulls and tugs at the heart. Romantic and dark...deep and sublime.... The revelation of that which could never be for whatever reason... The heart does revive, and in many instances hindsight allows us to understand that it worked out for the best. Font and color are hugely appealing. Substance is superb in quality...
I was born in Texas October of 1966. Raised in California where i fell in love with music and art. I came from a large , poor family where the most valuable thing we ownwed was our love for each other.. more..