My Island Loneliness

She came slowly into my life

 Like a rising tide

Seductively lapping at the barren shores

Of my island loneliness

Bringing seeds of love and life

To empty sands my heart

Almost overnight it grew in me

And met the sunrise with a smile

Soon fruitful dreams of joy abound

My lonely sands a stir

Grow I said and grow it did

I saw and watched my island change

But not to be forgotten

were the storms of old

Bringing angry waves at sunset yes

Under cover of the night sky

crashed a tidal wave I did not see

To wash away all signs of life

away from me

Sunrise found me beaten and barren

once again

 Upon my island loneliness

 awaiting rising tides

 To bring me Seeds of love and life

 

Author's Note

Not my best work but i just wanted to tell a story about the cycles of love. It might change. I know it sound kind of like others i have written but please just humor me with an opinion.

Reviews

[Dani California]

This is quite lovely ML... I agree with Kena,
it's a different style than I'm used to reading
from you and personally,
I'm quite taken by it.
A very passionate piece!

Lonely and sad, yet with a vision of hope.
A vision of love.....

Outstanding poem my friend! Truly outstanding.
I hope you write a few more like this .. :)

[Belinda Rice]

WELL I THINK IT WAS GOOD CAUSE YOU CAN FEEL HOW LONELY YOU ARE AND DESPRETLY WANTING THE LOVE BUT CANT SEEM TO CATCH IT IN HAND....GREAT JOB ON THIS ONE MR LOPEZ GREAT JOB...I ENJOY YOUR WORK AND LOVE READING EVER BIT OF THEM HOPE TO SEE MORE......BUT DONT LET BEING LONELY BRING YOU DOWN LET IT MAKE YOU RISE WITH THE WAVE IF LIFE AND RISE LIKE THE SUN AND BRING YOU STRENGHT GOD BLESS

[Abigail Alliah]

I think your note does not give the poem justice!
This must be the loveliest thing I've ever read. Better than entire novel's I've read about love.
The imagery is beyond what i could have dreamed of.
Its left me ravenous.

[RHEA CROSLEY]

Wow this is great. I mean you really hit this one out of the park. Great imagery and so smoothly bringing in the returning complexity of loss. I just like this piece and am going to add it to my favorites. Thanks my friend.

[Fran Marie]

Under cover of the night sky

crashed a tidal wave I did not see

To wash away all signs of life

away from me

Sunrise found me beaten and barren



I especially liked this verse and the imagery within~

such sadness expressed in sheer beauty of the written word

This is simply beautiful in everyway~ Exquisitely penned~Fran Marie

[LadyLove]

Yes?..maybe you meant eyes...sunset eyes. This sounds like a man who expects the cycle as it comes. As if it were an inevitable thing he's grown used to in some way. In that sense, it seems that he hangs on to the hope of his shore being touched by love again. He is both half-bottle full and half-bottle empty. I think most people should feel this hopeful in thier lives; To not give up watching the shore. Someday it won''t be washed away. Never give up!

[Chistie]

I agree with dani and kena i don't think it sounds like ones you have written, and that's not a bad thing! i think this piece is beautiful in it's differentness but lovley all the same! if that makes sence! Good job and like dani said i hope to see more like this in the future!
It actually reminds me of a book i just read, City of Bones, one of the main characters looses his familey and then falls in love just to have it yanked away, awesome book, awesome poem!

[Mariah]

I actually really like this one. There is a lot of imagery- vivid imagery- that guides you through the poem.

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

To me, it doesn't sound like all the others you have written. I like this one, it's great, such as all your others, but this one is different. Believe it or not, the metaphor of the sun and sands is not as overused on this site as it may seem. You take a different angle at it for us, and it's a beautiful write.

This part:

Bringing angry waves at sunset yes

I guess I don't understand why you would put 'yes' at the end of it, but then again, knowing you, it fits with your own special style, and to me, it didn't disturb the meter of the poem, although it was a little awkard.

but overall.....i look for your new poems. thanks....

kena

[Beka]

Wow.
despite what you say..This is wonderful.
I love it.
The way you weave your words is brilliant.
Love is often referred to as a storm
The barren island..wow.