Seperation

Seperation

A Poem by Mr. Lopez

Even after being severed for so long…….

  Why is it that I can still feel it?

Long after I have lost sight ………….

  Why is it that I can still see it?

Years after I last ate…….

  Why is it that I can still taste it?

Through transcendence from a slow calming

Winter separation

I still long for its cold embrace

Because I have eaten of the forbidden fruit

I will always hunger for its bitter sweet nectar

Although I have blinded myself of its view

I see it as a reminder of who I will never be

It would be so easy

 To eat just one more bite…..

It would be so easy

To know her cold touch just once more….

It would be so easy……

To change my view for a day

But I’ve been given a chance to balance the books

I have come too far forward

To fall so far back

I will live Forever more separated

 

© 2008 Mr. Lopez


Author's Note

Mr. Lopez
The battle of addiction is an ugly war in anyones life.I have seperated myself from the chosen substances to live in reality. Yet the battle lasts a life time. Just one slip and you will fall.

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I really relate with this as I think addiction is a part of everyone's life-some in their pasts and some in the present. I am sure there are a lot of people that would agree-At least those that are willing to be honest. The American Family Association says that 75% of families have someone that is addicted to something, creating gross dysfunction. I myself, believe the statistics have got to be higher than that....I appreciated this write. Just saying it like it is. I love to read writes like this that deal with every day battles that we face. So easy to relate. Thanks ML! :-) Carole

Posted 16 Years Ago


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i can relate to this so well...many people are struggling with addiction, some worse than others, whether if its an addiction to a peron, a drug, a feeling, or a compulsive thought, everyone can relate to this so well, and the concept you bring in here is universal to all humans, in regards to their characteristics...great piece, keep the pen flowing =)

Posted 15 Years Ago


Beautifully written ..a great description of the inner battle...the way the mind can play tricks..I love the end..

Posted 16 Years Ago


Very well written I really like this one alot.I hope to see more of your writing soon. ty for taking the time to share a great work of art with me.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yes, it is so true~ relapses to the addiction happen all too often~ and Then you have to do it over again~ It an everlasting Battle to stay clean~ Very well expressed and well penned~THanks for sharing this great write on the subject of addiction~Fran Marie

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love this piece. It has to be the best one written on the subject. I am glad for your author's note. It clarifies the meaning and makes it a more vulnerable write which I love.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think this is a very beautiful poem, and the feeling I'm left with is bittersweet too. The words are beautiful, the analogies are perfect, but I know it has such a true and deep meaning that is very personal, and that lends a sadness. I'm going to guess, based on my experience of writing about what I know and what I battle, that putting it on paper does help some. Keep writing about what you know and what is stuck inside. It can also give others who do not have an understanding or knowledge of what you have and are going some clue of the torment you write about here.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i know this feeling so much, that this poem has touched me quite a bit to the point of becoming wone of my favorites. great poem. great work.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem flowed and felt free from your creavtive mind, not forced one bit. Your choice of words were chosen very well.



Years after I last ate��.

Why is it that I can still taste it?

Through transcendence from a slow calming

Winter separation

I still long for its cold embrace



why is itthat i can still taste it? wow, that is deep and strong. i think you and i have a similar style to our writing, and maybe that is why we admire each other's work?? (wink)

nice job again. spoken word done well.

your cafe friend, kena


Posted 16 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow I know about this!!!
I can relate to this very well!!
The way you express this problem makes it very easy to relate to in many different ways!!
Beautiful Piece!!!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

After reading your poem and your authors note and then reading what Carole and Dani C. had to say...I don't know what I could possibly add. Your work as usual is brilliant, touching and deeply felt and TOTALLY UNDERSTOOD. I for one am in the boat with you, maybe just a little less separated than you, actually theres no maybe to it... :( Good luck and keep on rowing or battleing as the case may be and like Dani C said hang on to your friends here (Including myself) and elsewhere. It's all about winning the war. Congrats on a wonderful, honest, heartfelt piece. and Thank you for writing it.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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