Sculpt Me

With patient heart and tender hand

We find a way to understand

We look beyond the spoken word

For what’s not said but is still heard

When the faithful try to lead the blind

They enrich their lives not leave behind

What’s important to the very end?

That we all have at least one friend

When hypnotized by fruits of sin

We collapse the walls of love within

Beauty need not be transformed

Instead to live for hearts to warm

A flower shouldn’t die alone

A young heart need not turn to stone

When we connect the heart and head

We find that selfishness is dead

When we read between the lines

We free our hearts from painful signs

While nature writes prolific tales

It finds me dreaming of white whales

Focus, focus on what’s good

You’ll find that you’re well understood

Envision this if you can

Because only God can mold a man

 

Author's Note

rambling ranting wannabe poem.rrrraahhhh

Reviews

[Windy]

OMG that was no rambling wannabe, it was SUPERB, I loved it. It had such feeling, the flow was perfect, the ryhming well done, the message given (and recieved) The imagery was just enough... I can't say how very much I enjoyed reading this, it is definatly a favorite. From beginning to end, done just RIGHT! BRAVO Mr. L...(applauding you right now) PLEASE keep posting, I look forward to it though now you are really going to have to work at it because for me at least, this is going to be hard to beat. KUDDO"S to you. ;) ;) ;)

[LadyLove]

Are you kidding? This is great! Geez, don't boil your head like that! You made your point very well so pat yourself on the back if you can reach it. It's about writing what you feel for...you did good. Take care.

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

"When hypnotized by fruits of sin

We collapse the walls of love within"

(nice. that is a great sentence!!) overall, it parallels the rest of this "rant" which was strong at that. I loved it personally. you always write your poem with rambling words, with MEANING and then, at the end of the poem, you end with a strong line that makes us smile such as:

"Because only God can mold a man"

one thing: not all the ideas flowed as well together as a whole, but that's the only critcisim i have. overall, it was def a piece worth reading!!!

your cafe friend...kena

[Belinda Rice]

it was perfectly written man you have that hand like I always say there is nothing of such sort of rambling in this poem it supurb wonderful great and a true heartfelt peice...God i hope to continue to keep seeing more like this your getting better and better...congrads...

[Beka]

Well sir I do believe I enjoyed this "rambling ranting wannabe poem. rrrraahhhh"?
And I have good taste.
The way you mold your words is exsusid.
Lovely sir.
Simply Lovely.

[Your Tasty Field Adviso..]

in some kind of odd sence within my lost mind, i find a great force of wisdom. great work. you know a lot about what life is and should be, but isnt. great work.

[Carole]

This is clearly one of the most beautiful poems I have read on here yet. The rhythm and rhyme is to perfection...but more important than that, the message you portray goes straight to the heart and lends a perspective that is refreshing and full of life. I am so glad I read this tonight...Thank you! Could definitely see this published. Going into my favorites!

[Erin]

I loved how you kept such a perfect rhythm, good job the subject and wording was very educated.
excellent.

[Fran Marie]

A flower shouldn't die alone

A young heart need not turn to stone

When we connect the heart and head

We find that selfishness is dead

A most beautufully penned verse in poetic expression~
words of wisdom which inspire to be sure~Fran Marie

[justjenn_2u]

When hypnotized by fruits of sin
We collapse the walls of love within..............

This line had my attention from the second I read it. The feeling of love is swept under the rug when we run rampant with sin. Our very soul seems to die until we feel conviction to stop the same repeated sin. Thanks so much for this line in the poem. (I have always wanted to put that line in words, you nailed it).

Yes, only God can mold a man. If we can be more Christ like, we have it made.

I love this poem because I feel so much depth in the words. You never cease to amaze me with your creative mind and how well you are able to express inner emotions. Way to go!

[Dani California]

Bravo!!
Another path written by you
leading the reader into hope, faith and love.
Magnificent write!!

"A flower shouldn't die alone
A young heart need not turn to stone
When we connect the heart and head
We find that selfishness is dead"

ML..

You rock.

Truly.

:)