"And the award goes to........"

As I count all the grains of sand

                      That I can fit into my hand

I wonder if this was all part

                       Of her master plan?

 

One thousand………..

           Two thousand…………

                   Three thousand……….

                              Four………………

Can my heart even take one thousand more?

 

No wonder why she had so many tears

                             In her soft eyes.

It must be hard to go through life

                             Carrying so many lies.

 

Why is the truth such a hard thing

                   For some people to give?

Because behind their lies is how

              Some people choose to live.

 

    Five thousand ……

            Six thousand……….

                  Seven thousand……..

                             Eight…………….

 

How dare I have a vision

       For a life that could be great!

Who do I think I am

       Begging her to communicate?

 

The nerve of me to say

            That I would walk away.

To avoid all this destruction

           And the disarray.

 

I guess she thought the truth

             Just wasn’t meant for me

Instead more fitting to destroy my life

             And now I see.

 

If one day we both knew

            That things would go this way.

Would we have had the strength to

            Say goodbyes that day?

 

“Congratulations!”

They say while their handing me my prize.

I am the recipient of an award

For believing the most lies!

I feel my prize

         Slowly………

                 Slipping through my hand.

My award is in the form

                 Of a thousand grains of sand.

 

Author's Note

The lies are many like the grains of sand and as far as the eye can see.

Reviews

[Spoken]

love the ending, very powerful and just wraps the whole piece up. Also a very strong metaphor that fits perfectly.. I completely agree! This is one of those "sometimes when you win.. you really lose." instances.. well thought out and followed through! Awsome! ok.. I'm running out of adjectives... lol

[Mistral Bilgera]

painfully beautiful.
:)

[Kara Emily Krantz]

wow. this was really on par with what i've been thinking about a lot lately. kinda threw me off, to read this - as though you had taken the thoughts from my head and made a great poem with them :)
"Can my heart even take one thousand more?



No wonder why she had so many tears

In her soft eyes.

It must be hard to go through life

Carrying so many lies."

i love that part the most - really well done.

i've been thinking about truth a lot lately. why cant' we all just be honest with each other? then we could work with the things that are real, rather than trying to sort through the blurry lines.

i also wanted to thank you for always being there- i've noticed that you are always one of hte first to review my new pieces, and i'm so appreciate of that. you are a constant here, and that is comforting.

big hugs

[Dani California]

SHAZAAAM!!!

ML!!
You are an incredible writer....
incredible I tell you!!
If you stop rhyming like you threatened...
I'm going to stop writing!
Well,
probably nothing that drastic.... lol
but I will be very very disappointed!!

This was simply, truly, an absolute masterpiece...

One thousand���..

Two thousand����

Three thousand���.

Four������

Can my heart even take one thousand more?



No wonder why she had so many tears

In her soft eyes.

It must be hard to go through life

Carrying so many lies.


Wholy sh***! This was simply brilliant!

[Beka]

This is a heartache and a half.
I had a horrible night and this just slapped me in the face.
Its beautiful though.

[darkgurl]

"No wonder why she had so many tears In her soft eyes. It must be hard to go through life Carrying so many lies." Love these lines right here, this write is wonderful it has truth, so very well written.