Too many

Too many

A Poem by Mr. Lopez

Many a man have been left for dead

On this battlefield of life

With the ground now stained red

 

Many a tear have been shed for the sad

Only to be wiped away

And replaced for the glad

 

Many a sad song has been sung for love lost

For some, their actions not realized

Of the pains they have caused

 

Many a prayer has been whispered for peace

To a God who forgives all

Of our sins we’re released

 

© 2008 Mr. Lopez


Author's Note

Mr. Lopez
I could probably add more to this and may still do so..... what do you think?

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Perfection. Very well constructed. It sings...

Many a prayer has been whispered for peace

To a God who forgives all

Of our sins we're released

Excellent! Leave it as is...

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the repetition, the rhyme, and the beat of this piece and it really causes one to think about life and how it passes so quickly. Thanks for your thoughts.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A happy yet tragic piece. Momento's of memories, tears of pain, sins forgiven, yet as a world of man, we can be quite insane.
I wish mankind could be more then we have been.

Great poem!
Nature's Essence

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

love the flow


well done

:]

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think it needs something more.
I can't quite put my finger on it but you can tell that it still has lines to be uncovered.
It's a lovely start though darling.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That is a powerful line "To God who forgives all". A wonderful thing to know experientially. Enjoyed writing, thanks.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good job, i wish i could write poetry like you!! The words flow nicley!! Thank you for sharing!!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think it's perfect as it stands, but if you added more would likely still be perfect, but longer. lol
Excellent write! You've captured the heartache of humanity, our suffering, brought on by our own hand.

And then forgiven by the hand of love.

Beautiful. :)

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Mr. Lopez

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