Forever's a long time

How stupid am I to think

The world is so small

That I might shrink

To be cast away and soon forgotten

To be tucked away

In your back pocket

Just another piece of the puzzle

You call your life

Some day somewhere

You’ll be someone’s wife

Never, I say, never can you erase me

And always, I say always

Will you be a part of me

We can’t hide the impact

That we’ve both had

We can’t drown the memories

Both good and bad

To try to would be a senseless act

Forever entangled

That is a fact

 

Reviews

[Kara Emily Krantz]

love the title, and how it is shown in the poem differently than was to be expected.

i like the forever entangled part, as well. i liked the concept you have here... that feeling of yes you may move on, but we've touched eachother's lives, and you can't take that away...

nice job m'dear

[Carole]

How stupid am I to think

The world is so small

That I might shrink

To be cast away and soon forgotten

To be tucked away

In your back pocket

Just another piece of the puzzle

You call your life

This lady obviously meant the world to you. You are very good at expressing yourself clearly and concisely. Writing is good for the soul. I hope you are finding release...carole

[Mistral Bilgera]

i wonder if you write from experience.... every poem of yours seem to have vivid feelings and are heartfelt!

[The Tao of Bri]

Wow.. I am so sorry that the emotional ebb tide that you must have gone through to produce such a stunningly sorrowful piece...it hits you right between the eyes and drops you to your knees the grief emanates so strongly from this.. Sorry that it did not work out for you... It is true sometimes the most intense relationships that will last with you forever are not the ones to meant to be for some odd reason...intensity scares people away sometimes and makes them do foolish things...seems like you were strong enough for it and they weren't... very sad...here is to spreading your wings and finding one who will be strong enough for romance and love should never be humdrum indeed!!!!

[Your Tasty Field Adviso..]

great work. the feeling within the words, the sensation throughout the verses. i love it.

[MarchAprilMayJuneJuly]

this has a lot of true meaning in it, but it has an even deeper meaning..

i think that you defined and put into the word forever very well....

nice job!-
~may

[lilain]

Yes, indeed we cannot erase our pasts and those who shape us. No matter how we try, even if we want, our life path isn't meant to be ignored - even those who've moved on.

I love the intensity. I felt the pain.

Great job and thanks for sharing.

[Jessi]

Great write what was your inspiration to write this I love it Its wonderful

[Mariah]

ooohhh...so sure, no wishy-washiness in this poem.

'To be tucked away

In your back pocket

Just another piece of the puzzle

You call your life'

LOVE these lines.

I like that this seems to be a different take on a 'breakup'.

[Dani California]

Wow! This is a highly emotional and powerful write re the agony of a break-up. Most, if not all of us can relate to this. Unfortunately.

Very well written structurally... but I was more drawn to the content and the rawness of it.

Excellent writing.