Prayerpoem

I’m drowning in a sea of tears

I cried a river that led me here

Only God knows that I tried

To walk away

The demons weren’t satisfied

So now I pray

Please don’t let them take away my soul

God knows that it’s the only thing I own

 worth anything

If I could sit beneath the tree of tranquility

I could grow to be the man

I was meant to be

I would walk into his light ‘til the end of time

Give up control of a life that was never mine

Today I live beneath a sun of sorrow

On my knees I pray to see tomorrow

Drowning in a sea of tears

 I pray

Please don’t let them take away my soul

Because it’s the only thing I own

That’s worth anything.

 

Author's Note

When dark thoughts cloud my brain i know then that the enemy is hard at work. The flow could use some work, I may revise it later.The title may also change.

Reviews

[RHEA CROSLEY]

Yes and we know that as you draw near to God He will deliver you. But some times the conflict feels overwhelming and yet there is still hope. I thought how sorrow has good company for Jesus was "a man of sorrows acquainted with grief". And a He promises are trials work for us an award to big to measure. May we both have faith even when it is a flood. Good brave writing on the soul.

[Kitty]

you k now me and my writings.. I can only write what I experience.. and I experience God everyday..

This is your soul on paper.. we have all been here.. and God has always brought us THROUGH... through is the key word.. we never stay in the storm..

Keep on praying,

Melba

[Carole]

Perfect rhythm and rhyme here, ML. Don't we all fight the enemy of our souls!!! I relate.

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

I love this! absolutely love this! a ten! i agree, I believe strongly in the Adversary, and I know that he is always trying to bring us down, to his level.

"Please don't let them take away my soul," very intense, and longing, for life, laughter, happiness, love that only the SAvior can bring.

Again, I have to tell you, I love this poem. Up my alley. going into my faovirtes.

[Cliff Rhodes]

"I would walk into his light 'til the end of time." This is a beautiful line and seems the antithesis of some of the other lines but the piece still has a very emotional cathartic reverberation that denotes quite a struggle going on here. I personally think the ending needs to change and it leaves me hanging, wondering if there really is a return to the light. It seems to take a sad downturn even before the end. I believe that God is ever present and we have but to seek in order to find. Thanks for sharing with us.

[Raven: The Thought Hole]

This was a different form of poem that caught my interest. It's odd.... in some parts I liked the short line like "I Pray" and "So now I pray." But at other places, I thought it disrupted the flow of the poem like in "worth anything" to walk away" I just saw the previous line as connected to it so i didn't understand why you broke it up.

Definitely some strong emotions that are coming through. Most of all, though, I felt sincerity.

[Your Tasty Field Adviso..]

great work. well thought out, well planned. great work. i love how you show that you're sorry for the things you've done and are willing to change. Great work. :D

[Jessi]

Beautiful you capture every part of fighting with the demons inside perfectly i love all your work

[Belinda Rice]

i think this is beautiful the way it is you wrote this peace wondrfuly.....the dark clouds may cloud your brain but god is always there to help never let the devil win..this poem is telling you to be strng i think god was sending you th message to continue with life as it is...good job