Let him grow

Is it wrong for me to dream?

Of what’s right for me

To live in a fantasy

My sanctuary

 

Is it ok for me to preserve

What’s left of me?

What I deserve be

And to observe

She’s there for me

 

Can you blame me and take

My smile from me

What’s meant to be?

My sobriety

 

What could it hurt?

If I went on with my life

Took a wife

And lived happily

 

Would it be oh so wrong?

I’ll move on

To live long

And to plant a tree

 

Now I can’t turn my back

To what’s right

And I won’t

To the light

She waits for me

 

Reviews

[Raven: The Thought Hole]

I guess we all do plant a tree in our own way. As some people before me said, I think you should work on the flow a bit more (reading out loud) but I understand, its hard to do in poems because of syllables and all.

I suppose there are people who are happy and then there are those who are happy because of introspection and observation and analysis. Good to see your questioning and thinking :).

[justjenn_2u]

Your dreams are the element of your life that carries you forward. Through one of the worst trials in your life, you are holding onto all of the beauty you hold inside. You don't let torment overtake your inner being and multiply, creating bitter feelings and hopelessness.

She was sent for a reason, or else she wouldn't be so persevering. And she isn't going anywhere either.

When God lends a warm hand to help another through tribulations, reach out and grasp that helping hand, for I believe it will help pull you through. God gives her strength to hold on, and she needs this trial in her life too. Perhaps she has never held so strong to something she believes in. This is her break through.

Aside from my interpretation of this piece, this poem is so full of true and solid emotion. With direct words, you get a clear message across and give the reader an insight of how one has trials in life.

This is my favorite poem of yours yet! Write on, my friend! Good job!

[Michael X]

Excellent poem i really enjoyed the way the entire concept came full circle, to grow toward light of love,
the rhythm had a specific flow of beat, and is really fluid in motion, the passionate, insightful meaning
is metaphorically enhanced, which in turn draws the reader to ponder in light of touching meaning,
there is an encouraging aspect to your words, in ways deining what it means to dream, very well written