Let him grow

Is it wrong for me to dream?

Of what’s right for me

To live in a fantasy

My sanctuary

 

Is it ok for me to preserve

What’s left of me?

What I deserve be

And to observe

She’s there for me

 

Can you blame me and take

My smile from me

What’s meant to be?

My sobriety

 

What could it hurt?

If I went on with my life

Took a wife

And lived happily

 

Would it be oh so wrong?

I’ll move on

To live long

And to plant a tree

 

Now I can’t turn my back

To what’s right

And I won’t

To the light

She waits for me

 

Reviews

[Raven: The Thought Hole]

I guess we all do plant a tree in our own way. As some people before me said, I think you should work on the flow a bit more (reading out loud) but I understand, its hard to do in poems because of syllables and all.

I suppose there are people who are happy and then there are those who are happy because of introspection and observation and analysis. Good to see your questioning and thinking :).

[Kelly D. Burris]

You did a good job relaying the torment one may feel in this piece. Wanting so badly to live and yet unable to stop turning and looking at the past.
Now I can't turn my back

To what's right

And I won't

To the light

She waits for me

I wasn't sure if "she" was here and in the physical or if "she's " passed on. "To the light" could reference God and keeping faith in His plan, or that your staying faithful to a promise to her that even surpasses death.
Nice work!

[Jessi]

wow I love this I just want to know where your inspiration comes from your writting is always so wonderful

[Dani California]

The fact that I am a big time dreamer gives this poem even greater quality to me than it already holds... which is a lot.

To dream... is to be. Without our dreams we have nothing but what is force fed to us.... whether we like how it tastes or not. I cannot imagine living a dream free existence. What a horrifying thought.


Now I can't turn my back
To what's right
And I won't
To the light
She waits for me


Brilliant.

[Your Tasty Field Adviso..]

i love how much lust for peace is within this poem. i really love it. great work of art. the flow needs a little more work, but what am i to say, i still love it, the poem does flow very well, but in parts it doesnt do it. regaurdless, its a wonderful piece.

[The Tao of Bri]

how beautiful it is to have one wait for you as life works out its miracles.. Beautiful write that seems to be a tribute that is so richly deserved! May itBe

[Silent Pacer]

Well, I really like it, and am very amused by the rhyming (sorry, my spelling to day is very bad,lol). it is different in my eyes for some odd reason. All the same, it is a very nice piece of work, that has a good strong message, very nice job.

[Kitty]

...At some point in time, we must allow ourselves to think we deserve the good things in life, peace, a spouse, love..and from that abundance of love, to give to our brothers and sisters ..

We are all children of God and He gives us a new life when we walk in him, all old things are gone, and he has made everything new.. in you.
Beautiful, hopeful write.

Write on,
Melba

[Belinda Rice]

the whole poem is great there is not just one part that i like...this is so loving and caring, just for the life that you seem to want to indore, your a great writer keep up the good work...i will read you others to i promis you great peace.

[badgirl beth]

Great emotions penned onto page in this write..My pleasure to read and review.Cheers:)