Grievous Angel

I thought I could hang on

Because I thought I was strong

But I’m only a man

And from the truth

A man cannot hide

 

When I first felt my life slip

From my last finger tip

I remember thinking

“This is going to be

A hell of a ride”

 

As I fell through the air

I remember wondering” Who’d care?”

Like a fallen angel

On a broken wing

Without a prayer

 

I was falling so fast

But in slow motion it passed

Giving me time to reflect

On what I knew

could not last

       

                                       

 the ground was comming so quick

And it made my stomach sick

This would be violent

It would be messy

But would I feel it?

 

What could I have done not to get here?

Answers not found in a cold beer

I turned to face the end

Knowing acceptance

Would be my last friend

 

A sudden halt

and bones crushed

I could taste my own blood

But breath hushed

 

All alone and forgotten

I’d finally reached ……….my rock bottom

 

Reviews

[Kitty]

I love this. Great imagery. Its the life of a lot of us, when we find vice, and let it suck us in, next thing you know, we no longer have control, and it has control in us, even still we see what is happening to us, but we cant seem to stop the fall, until we hit...rock bottom. Its a good thing there is a rock bottom.. I believe it is Gods Grace...

Write on Mr.
Melba

[The Tao of Bri]

Yes... man.. I am hearing a madning theme here that i can relate to all too well! Great write delving into that pit with the rocks to break the fall and man..

[MelyG.]

OMG....great way of explaining how we can hit ROCK BOTTOM you are truly amazing with words...

[Silent Pacer]

wow, this tale you have woven is very emotional strong, and vivid, but it sounds like your own personal experience in a personal hell, and this is thus what i see with this poem. I personal, in this sense, and understand your feelings, to an extent, though i wish not to compare your pains to mine, being we are two different beings who know not each other's pains. not the less, i found this poem to be very vivid and strong, and definently one that will stick with me for some time. job well done.

[badgirl beth]

Oh the dreaded rock bottom..Been there many a time my friend..and the depth of emotions penned explain it so very well..A most powerful write..Bravo~to you for the great intensity of which it is penned..

[Belinda Rice]

this is also another great peace but like i say never give up hope and belive life will see you thorugh. you have a great mind to be able to share such an wonderful peace of heart felt and and true feelings of life and i never seen a man that could write feelings down like you did here......but never harm your self cause there are people out there that care i had to learn that my self....I put my belef and trust in the lord and i cryed out to him and he answered all my prayers i hope that if this is how your feeling that god can do the same for you ......great write

[justjenn_2u]

Yes, I see how you thought you had so much strength but the flesh is so weak. To admit that you are only a man shows a different type strength. A strength that shows vulnerability, sensitivity, and room for growth.

This is a powerful message here. You speak of falling in slow motion (allowing life's events to pass before your eyes and having to face the inevitable). Without this trial, you wouldn't be as spiritually strong as you are today. You are no longer just a man, you are living in His spirit.

I feel this poem is free flowing, not forced. This came straight from the heart. : )

[Solis-Lopez]

wow that's amazing. is that really what it feels like? falling quickly but realizing everything could have been prevented slowly. a sad recollection but it was a nice feel