Why?

Why?

A Poem by Mr. Lopez

I often lie awake in bed

With these thoughts racing through my head

Of why a didn’t die that day

I often wonder why

 

Many times in life before

I’ve had death lurking at my door

Waiting patiently I see

Out of the corner of my eye

 

I hear him in the twisted metal

And in silent screams

I feel him pulling at my back

And see him in my dreams

 

To God I give thanks for every day

How many times I cannot say

For every breath, every smile,

And every pain

 

There must be some grand plan

I think

For this unworthy old man

I think

To endure I’m sure

Another waking day

 

So I lie awake in bed

With these thoughts going through my head

I wonder why I didn’t die that day

I wonder why

 

© 2008 Mr. Lopez


Author's Note

Mr. Lopez
This is a rough draft that will change i'm sure. It felt a little forced .....I can't seem to break my block. Please be kind:)

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Hey, sorry I took so long to review, my computer broke down and I have been spending the last week or so trying to fix it...
okay, about the poem, I truly and deeply like it. does this speak of a previous event or just in general? just curious, I actually saw myself in here, since I am often several sick, and I am also greatful... I really think you are making headway with your writers block, this is a very strong piece, one of the more vivid ones in my eyes... so keep it up!! goor write!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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You know...I have battled the same demons....ended up trying to kill myself...started off cutting...taking pills....i took so many i passed out in the middle of the street...ended up in the hospital surrounded with padded walls...It seems it wasnt my time to go...like i had a purpose here....thanks for sharing...

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hey, sorry I took so long to review, my computer broke down and I have been spending the last week or so trying to fix it...
okay, about the poem, I truly and deeply like it. does this speak of a previous event or just in general? just curious, I actually saw myself in here, since I am often several sick, and I am also greatful... I really think you are making headway with your writers block, this is a very strong piece, one of the more vivid ones in my eyes... so keep it up!! goor write!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is a very good write, god has a plan for all of us and thats for us to live as he planed for us to do....he will not take anyone that he is not ready for....God heres crys and listens to the words eather spoken or written, just believe and you will see why you dident die that day....i hope to see more of you writing great peace. we all have thought about this and asked why but in your heart you will see and know.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

still a very nice poem. ur wondering at how come u didn't die makes it seem kind of hazy or something. very lyrical, i wish i was as good as rhyming as most people like u X3

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I see your thankfulness in still being ever present in this walk of life. God has a purpose for you thus he has given you trials but kept you standing. Yes, I wonder how many times a mere man can look death straight in the eyes so many times and still be here. The more I think about it, the more I know his existence is God's will. Keep the words flowing from your heart as they always do!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I thought it was a good piece that seems to convey what you wanted to do..not sure about the forced part..often people fel that flowery language nees to accompany a piece...but for me it is the emotins that are invoked to evoke the same in the reader that is all that matters... I felt this ... I sensed this.. I could see you doing this and hafve thought of how many times I have done this...thought and feeling provoking piece so it is all good!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Mr. Lopez

Chandler, AZ



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