Darkness

A short story I did for class.

The death around her filled the air, lingering in her nostrils as she ran. Every door she came upon was opened with urgency, every locked door busted open at the same time the worry in her mind got closer. As  she came upon a dead-end a feeling of dread washed over her for she knew the darkness was getting closer. She had nowhere to run and nowhere to hide, trapped in an empty hallway all she do was wait for it to come, wait for it to come for her.

Reviews

[xCasper]

I'm sorry but that first line is very cliche.. Very off-setting in my opinion.

Also, use commas. They can change the entire feeling of a sentence.

[Jules]

Good suspense. Is that where it ends? If so, you should add more. I am wondering what is going to happen.