Unable to Fail (revised)

A revised version of my previous work Unable to Fail

Unable to Fail

From the beginning of school

I coasted with ease.

I was such a fool-

I had a gift, I did not seize.

This gift I have had forever,

I never seemed to understand.

This gift that could reveal the answer,

And grant me an upper hand.

I could not fail,

Even when I tried.

My gift, to my avail

Was my one true guide.

I sold myself short,

To my excuses and my fabrications.

They gave me the reasons to resort,

To ultimate laziness and stagnation.

I missed my chance

To truly prove my self-worth.

At second glance,

I know I’d had it since birth.

But fallen I am not,

I will rise to the top.

I will not let myself rot

On this one little flop.

If there is no door open

And no windows around back

I’m going through the wall

No amount of concrete can hold me back.

I know my future is mine,

For no one else to decide.

If the star fail to align,

The gods can step aside.

Hellbent on my success

Hellbent on my name.

There is no space for indolence

It is time to make my claim.

No one will hold me down

No one will stand in my way.

I am going to crackdown,

That “someday” is today.

Reviews

[Will Fairlie]

This revised one is just as good, but the fourth stanza from the bottom, the rhyming seems forced; try a better word choice, or take the 3rd and 4th lines and rework them. All in all, this poem still hits a very personal place for me. I love it.