Introduction

Ladies and gentlemen put your hands together for Leonardo Greff. For the
rest of the world it would be an honor to be in the presence of
Mr.Greff, but for me it was just another average day. Mr.Greff is my
father, and yes i know every other teen calls his father by his first
name or just "dad", but when your father is the first scientist in the
world to invent a time machine you cant just call him by his first name.
But I'm used to it, its not like he really loved me, i rarely get to
see him and when I do hes working on his next invention. The last time I
spent real time with him was when I was 7 years old and he was so
athletic so energetic so gregarious. Of course this was all before he
sold his first invention, before he replaced me with money. So here I am
now watching my father at the capital U.S.W (united states of the
world) in the year 2255 ever country merged into one union turning all
countries into states. But I am at home watching from the T.V. I usually
can't stand watching my successful father shun me. Yet i found mild
happiness hanging out with my two best friends Zack and Sophia. They
were my real family, they valued my thoughts and opinions, they spent
time with me. I have known Sophia since i was in the 7th grade and since
then I have loved her. It sounds stupid but it was young love at first
sight, but have always refrained from telling her how I feel, I don't
think she would ever be interested in a timid, lonely boy. But for me it
was good enough to be with her. For now my life seemed good enough.

Reviews

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

Nice, but you seem to be moving a bit too fast. You need to add more detail in every part. But the starting line was impressive. Sounds to me like a promising story. I so wanna read it :)

[StoryPosterShane]

Niiiice. The plot is good :). Some technical errors but overall good :)